As always the original idea its so great and original!
And this text until she choose the role play has the same energy and is able to stimulate but... since that part... its like all the originality downs... its an so standard role play that it makes attention decrease a lot.
Its like is sooo good the context of your idea that.. i expect a little more in that part, its just my opinion and feeback so feel free to ignore it.
I appreciate your feedback @sanchez.gomez. The role playing thing was definitely a bit cliche but it was fun to write! I will definitely keep your comment in mind for the future, keeping things as original as possible is a good goal!