Hahaha! I'm laughing from sheer joy and pleasure. This is erotica. This is what awesome shorts should be like. There was excellent flow ever moving progress of the story. There was background and details to make it feel real and just enough focus on lilys steamy actions to tantalize and push my hand under my panties.

I will use this as a guide for my own prose; which I feel is not as good as yours yet. Thank you for sharing!