Brother, beautifully done.
Ballad meter, for all its simplicity, almost certainly has the most potent neurological effect upon the brain. "Ballad Meter (poetry)/Common Measure (music)" is called such because it is "common" ... and there's a reason why. It works.
I hate to be all practical or anything, but "working" is not a bad thing.
There is something slightly mesmerizing, almost ethereal about this poem.
Elements, sing dynamos,
Whose lips dissolve the shade.
My name upon night's precipice,
Glow-diamond-drum inlaid.
I LOVE that bolded part. Flows like honey, potent imagery.
Quill