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RE: Sci-fi Short: Jump Start - Part 3

in #cryptogeechronicles6 years ago (edited)

Caught this, I think it needed to be two sentences:

Violent crime in the SDZ was an everyday occurrence there were no human police patrols and even the robot ones came under constant attack.

Overall, honest opinion the quality of the writing is excellent but I’ve lost the story. It’s strayed from the original premise a bit. Still interested to see how it resolves but it feels like slogging through a lot of information to get back to it.

Cheers,

~ Mako

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Cool thanks for the tips and feedback. I must try and pay mind to the difference between a book you can read large chunks at a time, to a blog whereby you can't.

Cheers.
Cg

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