RE: The Creepy Broadcast [Cryptails #1 Contest]
Hi, Atin. Welcome to Cryptails! Your submission has been officially entered into the contest.
The premise of your entry is tremendously powerful. The mere idea of an apocalyptic broadcast being ignored by an entire family as they succumb to the very evils that they were warned about is almost surreal and inherently fascinating, but I believe your story would have greatly benefited from a longer, perhaps more nuanced description of events. Additionally, the syntax of your prose could use some adjustments. I highly recommend using software such as Grammarly (or any other grammar checker) to avoid common mistakes and typos. Finally, while I think that the anecdote about the American Broadcasting Channel was relevant and further developed the mythos upon which you were working, the way you included it into the narrative was somewhat detrimental to the cohesion of your story. I would recommend putting such pieces of information in a separate section to allow the fiction to be experienced in a more direct and immersive manner.
That said, it was a really interesting piece to read!
Good luck in the contest!
All best,
Jean