Hi, @naquoya. We were really happy to see your entry!

Overall, this was a pretty solid story. The pacing was remarkably effective and managed to keep my interest at the optimal levels throughout the entire story. The proper use of language and punctuation also gave the reading an additional degree of “enjoyment”, a simple but rather hard to achieve sensation. This further asserted the “fear” this story evoked, which had the extra value of making me both fear the machines and fear for the machines.

I feel like the topic could have been a bit more compelling. The last man in the world and the war against machines are interesting but heavily used concepts. In terms of the contest, I feel the strong points of the story were independent of the topic. For example, the machines could have been aliens, or demonic overlords; so technology wasn’t a key factor for the horror. Furthermore, the medium could have been integrated into the story more effectively, for instance, what if the post was part of what is being recorded? Images could have been used to enhance this illusion.

Thank you for sharing this very enjoyable piece!