CREEPYPASTA Mr.Loop
I was only 12 years old when I encountered Mr.Loop. The year is 2007 Im 11 years old im about to leave 5th grade 5th grade was fun and all but sometimes i would hate it because I would always get in trouble for no reason because my friend would always blame stuff on me and that's not all of i would always get bullied picked on get called names and kids would always steal my lunch and it kinda felt like a loop for a year and i would always tell my mom and dad can i go back to my old school with my old friends but they would always say no.Finally 5th grade was over now.
Now i can tell you guys all the weird stuff that was going on at my middle school. Finally first day of middle school everything was going smoothly I was starting to make friends and everything was going perfectly I thought middle school was going to be alright for a year.But that all changed when i was a year ahead of school when other kids like me and they would go into the principle office but you see everytime a kid leaves the principles office they would always say its a loop and I always thought that was werid and my friends would always say try not to go into the principle office because he thinks i would say that I always thought that was creepy.A new day of school.
I did something really bad this morning i was in a fight with one of the kids that came out from the principle office and I was sent to the principle office and i said to myself oh no am i going to say it now i was in there was a principle named Mr.Loop since his last name was loop he said to me how did you get in this fight so i said he kept saying Mr.Loop is coming for you so i got angry and i punched him and he started fighting back so we got in fight. Then the principle said who is Mr.Loop and i said it was you. Then he got up and said follow me the principle said watch these films one film was a boy throwing body's into the river and said mr.loop the second one was a kid murdering people and said Mr.Loop then he stoped the films and said go to sleep. I woke up at my house and i saw a bump on my head and at the door it said Mr.Loop
The story itself is kind of good.But you seriously need to work on your grammar.
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Thank you for the feedback ill work on my grammar next time i write a story like this and this is also my first creepypasta i plan on doing more for the future and I got alot to work on if im going to write another creepypasta like this again thanks for the feedback.