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RE: Dead Poems, Round 11, Contest and Community Building
Regards! Hope you had a great weekend. Here, my dead poem: The collar of the shirt buttoned
Regards! Hope you had a great weekend. Here, my dead poem: The collar of the shirt buttoned
I feel such loneliness from these words, so much longing and regret.
You are very empathetic, @sumayyahsaido. Thank you for penetrating the lines of the poem with such sharpness.
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A strong desire for reading fills your spirit thirsting for letters.
A strong desire
For reading fills your spirit
Thirsting for letters.
- corderosiete
I'm a bot. I detect haiku.
Your bot has inspired poem in me ;) .
I find it interesting, usually one associates blinking with briefly closing an eye -
you have reversed it: to imply a brief opening - and thus captured most of the underlying tension your speaker grapples with here.
Also, an 'exile' - usually means to go away, not become buried deep within. Would 'gone underground' have captured the loneliness' action? or would that imply an 'activism' which is being denied? Altogether, a well-written and thought-provoking piece.
Thanks, poet! Your comment shows a careful reading, I'm flattered.
No, Poet. When words move someone so much, it is hard to silence the expression of one's interpretation. It is all due to your clever wording, not your reader's ear nor his eye. Maybe in part, his heart. But that is all. Thank you for the poem and the reply.
Those who love the deepest tend to hold on just a bit longer. Fabulous work, ZC:)
Great imagery and flow in this one