Hey Sandy, I just read your entry. I would like to offer a couple suggestions to help you.
I believe you may have a typo error near the end of the story , "Tp" ? or should it be "To"?
Secondly, the text would have a cleaner easier to read look if just incorporate using a "blank space line" between paragraphs. It is considered to be proper formatting from what I have seen on other contest comments from the judges.
Best of luck,
@sultnpapper