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RE: Finish the Story Contest - WEEK #16

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This week I was able to make it in time, @f3nix. This way my participation.

Go ahead, Marc," Cornel said categorically and firmly.
A man came in with a small scar on his left cheek and a shaved head. He spoke briefly in Cornelius' ear. He looked sideways at Elissa and she felt a chill running down her body. I have to think fast, act fast. The newcomer stood next to Cornelius and looked at her. Her eyes penetrated some space in her mind, she knew that. I was opening passageways, looking for the truth.

Do you know that God's dictatorship goes where it suits us? Cornel spoke as if in a thought. Then he went straight to Elissa.
There are ways to overcome death, such as that of allying with herself," she continued to hold the gaze of the woman who felt her legs weakening. The weight of the 45 on his waist hurt and burned.
Some of us are the embodiment of fear, of anger, of the worst that human beings can feel," he continued to stare at her. It was his imagination or Cornel's eyes had changed color. Elissa felt dizzy, the gastric juices were starting to eat part of her stomach and acid was reaching her throat. What part of her was seeing those eyes. Cornelius followed his monologue:
What are you afraid of, Elissa? What are you afraid of? Did you know that we become immortal if we don't know death? Elissa felt all eyes set on her. She felt cornered like an animal on a hunt. Who had betrayed her, who that newcomer was, what he had said in Cornel's ear. Lots of questions, no answers. He felt a part of his brain threatening to explode. A bitter water came into his mouth, swallowed thick.
You know what's interesting, Elissa," continued the leader with a soft, rhythmic voice, "that some people can be evil to some, but justified by others. Evil is relative. There's a lot of people out there who need to die.
He felt a force come into her and absorb her breath. The blood felt it flow through her veins like a thick river. The eyes had gone in and they were stirring everything inside her. He lost something, strangely enough, his body felt slight.
Take your gun and do what you must, Elissa. Don't be afraid. We all know you'll do the right thing," Cornelius sneered one last look.
Elissa took the gun and, as in a dream, she mounted it. His gaze was still in Cornel's eyes. A dark, revealing silence dripped into space. He raised his hand and an index finger pulled the trigger. The sound of impact broke the dumbness of space. Before Elissa's eyes, Cornelius' figure laughed as his eyes faded.

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Poor Elissa, I think I'm going to make a recap about her many deaths/trasmutations..
I liked the ideas underlying Cornelius' monologue!

There are ways to overcome death, such as that of allying with herself

This was particularly intriguing. Brava Nancy!

Elissa took the gun and, as in a dream, she mounted it.

Nope. Nope nope no don't do it, Elissa!

Thanks for your comments, friends!

you're doing it wrong, Elissa!

Ehm, I'm not sure of what I read! 😅

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..sorry @themarkymark, I stole one of your gifs but I couldn't resist. I trust in your understanding.

I like the psychological tension you put in your ending, Nancy!

I stopped in to read your ending. Good luck in the contest today. 👍

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