Fantastic story, @carolkean. I enjoyed the crisp ephemeral impressions. The way you structured the paragraphs worked well because it was rhytmic like a jazz concert. It reminded me of how Jack Kerouac used the dash- to represent the colorful blows of the horn- go! go! go! and the drum of the buddha- always smiling from his wise lotus throne on the mountaintop- Jack's mad prose replicating the beeps and boops and ahhs of the great jazzy saints.