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RE: Comedy Open Mic Round # 16 (First Entry)
Please edit your entry: 1) the first paragraph, "went on their luxurious car of the year", 2) You refer to Marilin as both he/his and she/her, I assume she is a she, 3) the last paragraph, the punchline, needs to be stated more clearly.
Thanks for your advice, I already made some corrections.