Hi, this is Mello. I was transported into the story from “the knock.” I became an observer in the shadows as I watched her receive her devastating news. Your word choices are gripping. I especially like these word combination: “as if seared into the memory bank of her soul.” Well done. I enjoyed the short read.
One tiny wish I would make is if “she” had a name.
Hiiii Mello of @beeyou, thank you for stopping to read it!
Though it was a short piece, it was a difficult one to write. Mere words felt woefully inadequate to explain the cataclysmic devastation of "The Knock".
Thank you for stepping into the mood of the story and "feeling it"!
By the way ... "She" was me!
wow this is a very sad @kismet2018. I'm so sorry to hear this and I want you to know that. I can not know what you have had to go through, but I can imagine and it is something truly tragic. I am glad to see you are writing about it so that your friends can understand you a bit more and offer you understanding and compassion.
Your strength and perseverance shows through very much in the short time I've known you! You may not be famous, but you are great. And I am so glad that I have had the opportunity to know you!
@davemccoy, it was "Oh Happy Day" when you reached out a hand of friendship and welcome to this profoundly lost, yet measurably excited Minnow! You are a remarkable man on this platform because of your generosity of heart! This world needs more like you, kind sir!
I cannot say say enough about the absolutely incredible people I have met in the #minnowsupportproject, #newbieresteemday, PAL Community! Their willingness to help and genuine care about another Steemian's well-being makes a heart smile and feel very safe!
Special shout-outs to ...
@davemccoy, @goldendawne, @beeyou - Paula & Mello, @bashadow, @amariespeaks, @wanderlass, @lynncoyle1, @seaslim ... and many more!
You make this ride a lovely thing! Thank you!
I am so glad that you are in this group of "incredible people"... You are a pleasure to be around and an uplifting driven soul! I do agree with you about everyone you mentioned and I'm so proud to be associated with you all!
Kismet you are wonderful!
Big smiles, happy heart here, @davemccoy!!!
Thanks so much for the shout-out @kismet2018! It has been my pleasure all the way :) I'm so glad that @davemccoy pulled you into this clan of ours; I am grateful for being a part of it as well!
Isn't amazing to have such a positive, warm, loving, helping (I could go on) social platform to be on? Most others are riddled with negativity, but this one is filled with all kinds of sunshine-filled pockets :)
I'm going to quit before I start dragging out unicorn metaphors!
haha... my thoughts exactly Lynn! I don't want the unicorn metaphors to come out either!
And same goes for you too btw ;)
Listen @davemccoy very carefully; if you EVER see the unicorn metaphors come out, it's time to tell me to call it quits; I will listen to you :)
It's truly a beautiful thing we've got going here, @lynncoyle1! Deeply grateful!!!
Wow you're a great storyteller @kismet2018. You captured these emotions in a short story and I like how you unfold the story, although it's a sad and shocking one.
Hellooo @wanderlass! Thank you for stopping by and your complimentary words! It was a low point for sure! Much has changed in me since then! When Joe died, it felt like the world should stop and things should be visibly changed in the world. But guess what, the world went on. Nothing changed in the world, but everything changed in me! Now I am grateful. Then I wasn't! It was a bitter, painful journey but goodness and strength came out of it! Thank you again, @wanderlass!
thank you @kismet2018 for the mention! Keep Steemin' my dear! you are wonderful <3
First you captivated me with “the knock”, and now you leave me in awe with your last line. Thank you for sharing your story. I really don’t know what say but that I admire your will to live on and create new memories.
Thank you, Paula @beeyou! THANK YOU for your help!
Re "The Knock", when I said, "Time has been generous in healing the exploded hole in her soul" ... it's true!
From that point on, "She" started a journey - digging deep inside, finding out who she was, discovering strength she did not know she had! The richest gift that came out of that was she developed a zest, an appetite and insane gratitude for every single day she is "gifted"!
Thank you for your compassionate response!