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RE: ADSactly Short Story - A Ray of Sunshine

in #adsactly2 years ago

It's an interesting story! Especially the first part when you play with the figure of the narrator. The way you narrate events is an interesting way to relate an event like death. I liked that! What didn't catch my eye was the end of it. I think he's very hair-triggered. It makes one think of a pink novel where the lost daughter appears at the end. I would have left the story until Mike died and was buried. Thank you for sharing


Thanks for the interesting review. I thought of leaving it at that too, but then we all love a story with a happy ending :)

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