Poem / A surreal event
A surreal event
A surreal event
I found myself at the top
Stranded in a tent
It had rained the whole evening prior
I just wanted to start a fire
There was nothing left to keep me warm
And I stepped on a thorn
The brightness of a million stars hung above me
There was so much greenery
I wished I had stayed behind
Lay on the couch and better enjoyed my time
As the morning drew closer
There was hope within me
That somehow I could stand up
Just to go take a pee
The air outside burnt my skin
My jacket felt paper thin
I ventured for a while
So that I could warm my bile
I got closer to the edge
Of a thousand meter ledge
The sound of a kilometer long waterfall
Made my agony withdraw
It was worth seeing the amazing sunrise
That came through the valley bellow me
There was nothing but orange mist
As the sun started upwards as the clouds it kissed
Being above the clouds
was like pure magic
Every moment lead me to think
Hell the journey here wasn't so tragic
I've finally reached the top of this berg
Through thunder, rain and pain
It was worth it to see this magnificent sight
It's brought me true delight
By Ethan
2017/07/24
nice poetry. keep it up
This Poem is a wrenching Trent. But still ... A surreal event.
XD I agree
This is powerful the pain evident in the poem, resteemed!
Thank you! ☺
I really appreciate the poem, at first I read it wrong making me think it was negative, I had another poet do something similar and it made me self conscious but after I read your poem again I felt really good, you have inspired me to continue onward.
Yes buddy you must continue. I am a tiny writer/poet myself and I do understand the pain and appreciate the efforts made by other poets. Peace..!!
Sometimes there are costs to bear to see or experience something wonderful. Sometimes there are challenges we must face in order to reach our goals. Life is meant to experience both good and bad so that we have a measure in which to understand and appreciate what we have and what we are. A measure of strength is persevering the hard times and finding happiness when it comes our way. Live in the now and breath!...... Cabbagepatch
Breath the breaths only you can take, Even if our live feel like and earthquake.
Continue to look for the rainbow, the trials we are given only make us grow :)
That is beautiful Ethan! I will use your beautiful words to serve as a remind to me when days get tough. You should build a poem on this because it really makes one stop to think that they need to refocus and breathe, and then look for the positive, like rainbows. Your words resonate deeply within me. Thank-you! :)
My pleasure :)
Beautiful, I liked it. It is very relaxing. Thanks for sharing.
My pleasure :)
FOLLOWED. great piece of poetry
alright, talkin' real poetry here, good to see some quality content in more areas... PEACE !
"So that I could warm my guile"... Hmm. So the character in this poem is disingenuous? I found myself no longer rooting for the hero after that. Did I misinterpret your intent?
By guile I meant to write bile that I had built up harsh feelings towards this trip when I had first started it. I apologize and have corrected it :)
Ah, that makes a lot more sense now. Thank you!
please follow and upvote me sir