Life is worth living
Life is worth living
Even if it makes us fail
Even if it's full of disappointment
sadness and pain
it can easily trip us up
Despite all that
life is still worth living
dashing your dreams?
Do not give up
Do not despair
Life is still worth living
it is beautiful
Full of people
that will give light
into our lives
cold as winter
Even if it gives us
the cold shoulder
Our life is definitely
worth living
How colorful it is
How exciting it is
Therefore be thankful
that we are living lives
worthy of living
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I have gone back from here to examine a number of your poems. You write a variety of poems that shows you have creative ideas, but almost all your poems have one fatal flaw.
I bet you think of it as your style of writing, but actually, if you were submitting your poems to a teacher of poetry, he would tell you the same, it is a flaw, not a style.
Part of writing a poem is in having the ability to touch your reader and grab a corner of his imagination and emotions.
You cannot do that by repeating the same line, again and again, even if you change it slightly now and then:
having the ability to touch your reader and grab a corner of his imagination and emotions.
Did my repeating myself contribute anything? Apart from it serving as an example of why you should not keep on repeating yourself - no, none at all.
I guess you are annoyed with me, but please, go back and read the last five poems you have written and now that I have drawn your attention to what you are doing, you'll see it for yourself.
It is a pity, for otherwise, I like your writing.
I'll follow for a while, just to see if you try to improve. If you do, I'll continue and encourage you when I can.
Thank you for your input. You are right I did think of it as a writing style of sort, but since you pointed it out it may not be appropriate. I'll try changing how I compose my poem and I appreciate more input from you. Thank you for dropping by.
Nice post thanks for sharing...
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I really like the poem, but also the picture.
Good work.
Keep going!!
Kryptonia
Indeed it's worth living! You were featured on the #54th Edition of @steemitfamilyph's featured posts. Congratulations!
Thank you for this post, sometimes this kind of message which would just pop out from my feed and try to share it on my other social media sites can really save lives. You may never know it will pass by a person having some suicidal attempts see this on your wall and take a glimpse on how life is really worth living the pain and suffering is really just a part of it.