Yes I agree @dswigle. It is the greatest thing about steemit, the communities here and the support they offer to help people gain, or as was the case with myself, regain confidence to write/perform/paint whatever the expression of your creativity is,you'll find an avenue. It is really cool. Thanks for your comment :-)
Hi, I enjoyed reading your poem. I could envision Vulcan, blacksmith of the gods, sweating in the infernal heat making shoes for the horses of Mars. It's cool that steemit has ignited your ambition as a writer. Thank you for the encouragement and the support you offer. I look forward reading your future posts.
Thanks @blanca237 I am glad the poem sparked your imagination, excuse the pun ;-) I'm glad you joined our community over at promo-mentors and I look forwards to reading more of your work also. Thanks for visiting, I write much better poetry than this old poem now I hope ;-) I shall be posting a Dsound recording of me reading a new poem next week. Thanks for visiting and commenting :-)
good stuff! i can see why it got published. I enjoyed how each stanza had its own theme so to speak. i thought it was a bit strange that "lego" was used since the rest of the language wasn't as casual, but then re-reading I saw that stanza had a lot of child-related imagery, and it clicked. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you @corinneiskorean both for the compliment and for your meaningful feedback. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. It is funny you should mention that line about the 'lego' as my poetry tutor at uni said the exact same thing when they were talking to me just prior to publication. She said, "I nearly wasn't going to include it because of the line
Lego-like in its satisfaction"
But she added that after a few reads she had decided she thought it was actually quite clever and obviously intentional. She then looked at me severly and said, "it was intentional wasn't it?" I told her this: to me that particular line was inspired by my love of building and painting models as a child. The child-like imagery was intentional throughout that verse to show the farriers kind of childlike intensity of focus. This seemed to satisfy her and the poem got published lol 😉 Thanks again for your comment and stopping by to check out my work
I'd never though of it before - the horseshoe is the only shoe I can think of without a sole - great play on words.
I usually enjoy make criticisms, but I see none other and I guess they know you better. However, should you ever read anything of mine, I ask that you do voice yours. How else can I grow as a writer or improve what I've written?
I see steemit as providing a unique servive, as we tend to take criticisms more personally when face-to-face and when from a relative or friend, whereas I cannot complain of the critic being prejudiced if we are strangers (unless blatantly prejudiced).
I shall cast a critical eye over some of your work when I get a chance 😉 @arthur.grafo. I think you are right about steemit by the way. It is a great place to get feedback without the face to face drama that can occure at workshops. I never had a problem with taking criticism when I attended writing workshops in uni, until I got home, looked at everyone's notes on my work and realized that if I followed all their 'advice' I would be re-writing the whole story. I guess I learned to take it and leave it, the feedback I mean. If it's stylistic and I disagree with what's being said, I simply disregard the feedback, after all it's my work but the trick I find, and it is hard, is to distance yourself emotionally from the story set out in your prose/poetry. Ha ha, rant over
your poem is very beautiful and meaningful @raj808 although I have some words that I dont understand and makes me find it in the dictionary because its too deep for me.. bht atleast those words were added to my wordbank. thank you for sharing your knowledge to us. I do hope I could join your sessions..
Thank you for your lovely compliment @queenlouise07. If I have helped you learn some new words I am very happy about that, my work here is done 😉 I look forwards to reading your work in one of the #promo-mentors feedback sessions if you want to drop by :-)
This reminds me of my dad, welding, and of demonstrations at antique shows - and how godlike these men seemed to me in my childhood: The farrier holds court in his furnace,
king of the fire living out dreams that burn,
this place where he is lord,
where all bends to his blistered hands,
Beautiful!
That is touching @carolkean. It is always a great joy I think, as a writer, when something you produced provokes such personal remembrances in someone reading. I am glad that it inspired such treasured memories.
I am trying to remember where the inspiration came from for this but the real core of it, is buried deep in my subconscious I think. I can remember the physical, environmental circumstances of how the theme emerged for the poem. I wrote it while on a writers residential with university. The residential was in Cornwall, and it was a part of a larger elective module called Exploring Place. It was all about learning how to infuse a stories setting with genuine feeling, atmosphere and spirit of a place. What a place to learn this skill. Cornwall has a magic all of its own. Our preparatory reading was daphne du maurier's Jamaca Inn, which I had never read before.
Anyway, one of the field trips was to a slate quarry and museum, which bored the socks off me. While the rest of the group toured the quarry, I found a farriers forge, in the museum area. It was kind of like a stable outside with a wax dummy of a farrier with a hammer upraised, anvil and a fake forge and bellows. It was raining and I was hungover, so I sat in this forge and this poem was hammered out 😉 Thanks for your comment and visit Carol. I am glad you enjoyed the poem
Ohhh, man, I love your telling of the field trip, the quarry, the forge, the wax dummy, the rain, and the hangover, all fusing an idea or image in your subconscious, which manifests, years later, in this poem. Now that's a story!
nice poetry mate :)
Thanks @sarah.baloch. I am glad you enjoyed it :-)
NIce poem! If you want to join us in the Poets United group and other groups just connect! We have (i believe) 40 members by now. https://steemit.com/curation/@angelveselinov/steemit-poets-united-daily-dose-poetry-and-prose-10-the-future-is-bright
Thank you! I love that steemit gives us confidence! Nice write and I look forward to more. Interesting using the horseshoe!
Yes I agree @dswigle. It is the greatest thing about steemit, the communities here and the support they offer to help people gain, or as was the case with myself, regain confidence to write/perform/paint whatever the expression of your creativity is,you'll find an avenue. It is really cool. Thanks for your comment :-)
My pleasure!
Hi, I enjoyed reading your poem. I could envision Vulcan, blacksmith of the gods, sweating in the infernal heat making shoes for the horses of Mars. It's cool that steemit has ignited your ambition as a writer. Thank you for the encouragement and the support you offer. I look forward reading your future posts.
Thanks @blanca237 I am glad the poem sparked your imagination, excuse the pun ;-) I'm glad you joined our community over at promo-mentors and I look forwards to reading more of your work also. Thanks for visiting, I write much better poetry than this old poem now I hope ;-) I shall be posting a Dsound recording of me reading a new poem next week. Thanks for visiting and commenting :-)
Nice! that sounds like fun (=^_^=)
@originalworks
good stuff! i can see why it got published. I enjoyed how each stanza had its own theme so to speak. i thought it was a bit strange that "lego" was used since the rest of the language wasn't as casual, but then re-reading I saw that stanza had a lot of child-related imagery, and it clicked. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you @corinneiskorean both for the compliment and for your meaningful feedback. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. It is funny you should mention that line about the 'lego' as my poetry tutor at uni said the exact same thing when they were talking to me just prior to publication. She said, "I nearly wasn't going to include it because of the line
But she added that after a few reads she had decided she thought it was actually quite clever and obviously intentional. She then looked at me severly and said, "it was intentional wasn't it?"
I told her this: to me that particular line was inspired by my love of building and painting models as a child. The child-like imagery was intentional throughout that verse to show the farriers kind of childlike intensity of focus. This seemed to satisfy her and the poem got published lol 😉 Thanks again for your comment and stopping by to check out my work
Your poem really deserves to be featured!
Thank you @kneelyrac. I appreciate your support, glad you enjoyed the poem :-)
I'd never though of it before - the horseshoe is the only shoe I can think of without a sole - great play on words.
I usually enjoy make criticisms, but I see none other and I guess they know you better. However, should you ever read anything of mine, I ask that you do voice yours. How else can I grow as a writer or improve what I've written?
I see steemit as providing a unique servive, as we tend to take criticisms more personally when face-to-face and when from a relative or friend, whereas I cannot complain of the critic being prejudiced if we are strangers (unless blatantly prejudiced).
ciao
I shall cast a critical eye over some of your work when I get a chance 😉 @arthur.grafo. I think you are right about steemit by the way. It is a great place to get feedback without the face to face drama that can occure at workshops. I never had a problem with taking criticism when I attended writing workshops in uni, until I got home, looked at everyone's notes on my work and realized that if I followed all their 'advice' I would be re-writing the whole story. I guess I learned to take it and leave it, the feedback I mean. If it's stylistic and I disagree with what's being said, I simply disregard the feedback, after all it's my work but the trick I find, and it is hard, is to distance yourself emotionally from the story set out in your prose/poetry. Ha ha, rant over
your poem is very beautiful and meaningful @raj808 although I have some words that I dont understand and makes me find it in the dictionary because its too deep for me.. bht atleast those words were added to my wordbank. thank you for sharing your knowledge to us. I do hope I could join your sessions..
Thank you for your lovely compliment @queenlouise07. If I have helped you learn some new words I am very happy about that, my work here is done 😉 I look forwards to reading your work in one of the #promo-mentors feedback sessions if you want to drop by :-)
This reminds me of my dad, welding, and of demonstrations at antique shows - and how godlike these men seemed to me in my childhood:
The farrier holds court in his furnace,
king of the fire living out dreams that burn,
this place where he is lord,
where all bends to his blistered hands,
Beautiful!
That is touching @carolkean. It is always a great joy I think, as a writer, when something you produced provokes such personal remembrances in someone reading. I am glad that it inspired such treasured memories.
I am trying to remember where the inspiration came from for this but the real core of it, is buried deep in my subconscious I think. I can remember the physical, environmental circumstances of how the theme emerged for the poem. I wrote it while on a writers residential with university. The residential was in Cornwall, and it was a part of a larger elective module called Exploring Place. It was all about learning how to infuse a stories setting with genuine feeling, atmosphere and spirit of a place. What a place to learn this skill. Cornwall has a magic all of its own. Our preparatory reading was daphne du maurier's Jamaca Inn, which I had never read before.
Anyway, one of the field trips was to a slate quarry and museum, which bored the socks off me. While the rest of the group toured the quarry, I found a farriers forge, in the museum area. It was kind of like a stable outside with a wax dummy of a farrier with a hammer upraised, anvil and a fake forge and bellows. It was raining and I was hungover, so I sat in this forge and this poem was hammered out 😉 Thanks for your comment and visit Carol. I am glad you enjoyed the poem
Ohhh, man, I love your telling of the field trip, the quarry, the forge, the wax dummy, the rain, and the hangover, all fusing an idea or image in your subconscious, which manifests, years later, in this poem. Now that's a story!