Situational Observance
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She came seeking refuge and found love. Her past in her blood, promising to keep safe a newborn son. She kept her promise but never protected herself in the end. The love she found was tainted, she could only send her son running as she took her final breath.
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Working with foreigners allowed him access to many grateful women to help. Then he fell in love. Over the years they would be happy and have a son, but he did not change. She wanted to leave and he would not have that, he would end her and the child.
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The boy's mother told him to run, and remember his blood. He stops. Staring at hands surging with power. He would revenge his mum. He returns to face his murderous father. Silently they stare, the man recognizes his end, as the boy makes a gesture and no mercy given.
But, but .... Yes I know there are 3 stories, but the same story?
I had this thought that sure I can make multiple entries or, or I could attempt to write it as a whole, being able to have a full story within 50 words but also have each part then form the same story. It does use perspective I guess which sucks and is not what I wanted but the other one of a single person would end up just being multiple personalities and again perspectives. If there are any ideas of how to structure something like that so it is different stories individually but another as a whole without using perspective change - then sure I think that is what I want. I think.
For now, this is what I got.
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This is kinda deep. As I read the three, I totally felt they were related, and while I didn't get a sense that each was the same story, I did feel they were "parts" of the same story.
Pretty cool concepts you're thinking about here for your writing. That's awesome in itself!
Looking at this more closely, and taking into consideration what you say you're attempting to do, (I think) - this is how I see things here:
As I said, when I opened the post, I started reading from the top, and got the impression I stated. Going back to read them again, with an eye toward your stated goal, I still see the three as I did, but I can expand on that now.
I see the first one describing the woman at a point of crisis, where she had made a life/death decision, and while she had hopes for her son's survival by sending him on, her time was done.
The second one, I see as a reflection back to the kind of guy her husband was, and why she did what she did in the first one.
The third, I see through the eyes of the son, as he plans to destroy his father, who had treated his mother so badly.
So I see the same people, at differing times and situations. If I read correctly what you are attempting, then you do want the same people, but you also want the story to be the same but told differently, (in some manner), in each of the three parts. I think it's possible to do that, using the same people, but I think the only way you could do it is by changing perspectives, which to you is just another factor that you want to eliminate from the equation. The three parts would describe the same scene with the same people involved. One problem I see in this case is that the father is not present in the original scene, so he can't play an active part in any other version of that scene. Only the mother and son are active in the scene and the father is merely a reference or thought of both of them throughout.
The son, in the third part seems to me to be a grown man seeking revenge at the time part 3 occurs, so the scene he is in is different from the first, making it a different story.
I can't think of another way to write the same story three times, with the same players and have them seem different, than by changing perspective of the players, told from their perspective, or by the perspective of some unseen narrator or narrators. In either case, perspectives can not only do what I think you're trying for, but the differing perspectives also offers the opportunity for individual nuances to describe the three parts the same, but different, three times in 50 words.
I'm probably completely off base with my take on this, because like I said, it's kinda deep. 😂
I might also be off by assuming that telling a story from anything but one angle is not a change in perspective. So more me missing the meaning and trying to make it fit.
As I read your thoughts and realised that any change would be a change in perspective - and this is actually a single scene or period of time in my mind when I wrote it - eg.: the mom dies, the son runs , discovers latent power (even magical ;) returns home to destroy father, the first two I think have back story which make them feel to occur over a longer period , the third of the boy is a single event.
Anyhoo it is open to interpretation as it should be.
Ok so back to perspective. Any change of view-point is a change in perspective, hence I would be locked into one scene I think? Now to have 3 different stories still I could have the boy observe the death of his mother and be influenced maybe by information she has shared with him giving that more focus and this keeps perspective anchored but changes perception? Then I rinse and repeat, I could even have the boy recall it all infront of a mirror maybe and have him change clothes , a dress when he is considering the scene from his perspective but allowing for information he has gained from his mother to be more relevant changing his perception of what has occured. Same with him dressed as his father, I think we might end up...
Then again I might just be overcomplicating things and using the wrong words to describe a feeling. Thank you for your analysis it is very helpful. I will give the story another read and consider what you said if I attempt it again maybe it all just comes together.
I believe you are correct. For example, if you were to concentrate only on the son's narrative of what happened for all three stories, (I'm thinking of a scenario where the son initially experiences the event, then recalls it at two later points in his life as he ages), his perspective on the event would most likely remain the same in all three stories, while his perception of it likely has changed to some extent, as the years pass by.
In this case, and since he was very young, his perspective of what happened likely wouldn't ever change, but I don't think it would be "locked" per se. Some other really eye-opening info that he hadn't known at the time, being revealed to him later in life, (maybe his mother's letter to him that he finds later in life?), could possibly affect his initial perspective, if he absolutely believes in that new info, but even then, it's what his perspective WAS, (his point of view at the time the event happened), that would have to change.
His perception of the event could very easily change however, based on even the simplest things, like his own maturation process over time taking place, or his absorption of little gossipy tidbits people who knew both his father and mother tell him here and there, over the course of his life.
A good example of a change in perspective, could take some political ideology, (to which a person adheres), as being a perspective that "tints" that person's point of view politically. When they look at, say, taxes on the people, they see the taxes from the perspective of the political entity and ideology to which they've dedicated themselves, which incidentally, is now their perspective on that issue as well. If something causes them to instead back a different political ideology, then their perspective on taxes is likely to change as well by default.
Not sure why this story made me give your profile pic a second look and can't believe I didn't notice it before....
Great story
Dark... But excellent... Love the punch it packs in such a short space.
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