Hi, @fajrularifst
Well dear friend, I'm so glad I asked you to give more. 🙏
You would have denied us getting closer to the culture in which you grew up.
You broadened my vision of temples.
A very well told story, from the beginning. The dramatic knot was well presented. You developed the character of Bandung Bondowoso very well, but I feel (after reading the story on Wikipedia) that justice should be done to Roro Jonggrang, and all his abilities.
You brought us a story of forced love, in the midst of magic, "jinn" demons and power struggles.
As a story editor, I always like to challenge the endings, sometimes asking myself "What if something else happened?", but creating another ending would have deprived us of a wonderful temple.
Sometimes stories do not require changes.
Task 1: Write a micro-story
| Task 1: 3 points Indicator | 2,66 point. Good |
|---|---|
| Length (150 words or less) Exactly adhere to the word limit or less. | 0,48 |
| Shocking title Creative title that generates curiosity | 0,3 |
| Start Clear, attractive beginning that hooks the reader | 0,48 |
| Knot Develop an interesting conflict or situation | 0,5 |
| Unexpected ending The surprise ending creates a lasting impression on the reader | 0,4 |
| Afterthoughts Reflection provides relevant cultural aspects. | 0,5 |
Total word count:
In Indonesio: 120
In English with title: 151
Tool used:
https://languagetool.org/es
https://wordcounter.net/
Capture in Spanish
Thanks for the rating, it seems like a good start for me to continue the #microwrite01 adventure.
This opportunity will be a great experience for me, I really enjoy it. Best regards from Indonesia!