Original Flash Fiction: Astral Echoes
Hi everyone, I realize I haven't posted much lately, at a bit of a crossroads in my life right now. This week I wrote an ending for "Astral Echoes", written by @raj808
Rain bounces off the frying pan streets, dowsing the city’s mid-morning swelter. Bangkok on a Monday screams its frenetic cadence into my sleep-stained head as I leave my apartment for the breakfast of kings. A hastily wolfed helping of Khao Neow Moo Ping and I’m on my way. This meeting is important for my continued livelihood. A prominent business man is convinced he’s beset by demons. 'Fung shui gone wrong', the words of his PA echo in my memory as I hail a tuk tuk and jump in.
“Sa wat dee”. I greet the driver as I scramble into the cramped cabin.
It is advisable to enter your tuk tuk promptly as the never ending stream of scooters can sweep you out and away at a moment’s notice. I’ve seen a tuk tuk's door taken off by one of these suicidal bikers before now.
“Sathon Nuea road please.” Pulling off into traffic, I find myself staring into the frantic smog choked kaleidoscope that is Bangkok. Five lanes of traffic jostle for position as scooters whiz between them, reckless of traffic lights, wobbling with giggling teenage passengers stacked three apiece. The salt-singed smell of frying shrimp and coconut oil mingles with diesel fumes as I sit back into the sticky red foe leather and consider what I know about this particular clients Astral footprint!
A room bathed in a dull indigo with a bed by the wall pulsing with ethereal light. A book sits half open on the bedside cabinet, pages twitching in the gentle flow of my aura. Light envelops this scene, green through to red as my aura shifts with the pulse of the indigo ether. I drift over the open book, a single word jumps out of the page like a lightning bolt ‘FATHER’. It seems to echo in my mind like a scream. I glance to my left and my adversary is still moving through the treacle I’ve set in front of him. I still can’t tell whether he’s human! The impossibly wide smile, desperate and hollow speaks to me of one possessed. A soul lost in the astral, then found by one of Them.
BANG, I spin as the wardrobe door slams open and closed over and over. The noise echoes through me as an icy wind spills from the flapping doors. The indigo glow subsides to a dull shimmer as the room darkens and I turn back to my advisory.
He is there right before me. Mouth impossibly wide the teeth icicles and his breath covers me in the stagnant smell of the swamp as my bones numb and my knees give way. I choke as my breath sticks in my throat and the scene fades to night.
“What are the symptoms Mr Xioin?" His pallid face twitches as I stare into sunken eyes, unblinking, pupils wide. "How do these daemons manifest?”
“The night is where they reside. Between dream and waking. Sometimes I wake from a dream only to be enveloped by a strange light. After, I walk in the wakening world, around my apartment and... everything is enlivened." He breathes in short gasps as he talks. "It’s as if everything has a soul, the lamp, my leather chair even the books call out there stories, words that wash through me like fire." His head dips and rests in the palm of his hands. "There is no rest”
“Go on...” I lower my voice as I watch his body shivering in the pain of memory.
“Then there are the dreams that seem to be reflections of my life. I'm working at the company, except it’s like I’m looking over my own shoulder as someone else performs my daily routine. I’m convinced I’m awake until I actually wake and it feels as if I’ve never slept at all." He stares into my eyes, pupils contracting back to a normal size for the first time since I’ve been here. "Can you help me?”
My heart strains against my chest as I struggle to close my third eye, a dull ache in the center of my forehead. He smiles like a clown, an open wound across his face, mocking me. White mists swirl around us as a landscape forms in the astral firmament, his mind superimposing a tapestry in the space between dimensions. I look around searching for any clue to his nature. Any clue that will help me to defeat him.
Mr. Xion's eyes roll back, with only the whites of his eyes visible. A dark guttural voice assaults my senses. "You fool, do you believe you can defeat us?" My heart begins to race, and I reply weakly. "What do you want?". Harsh laughter echoes from the walls and the voice continues "I do not sleep, I do not eat, I will have his soul!". The room fades to black and I feel myself falling into a black abyss. I feel great pain as something stops my descent. I bounce like a ragdoll. I find myself hung upside down above an inferno of flames, the Sulphur and smoke filling my lungs. I am hung from a single scarlet thread, impossibly bearing my weight.
The face of the demon grinning and laughing fills my vision and invades every corner of my mind. My heart fills with despair in my helplessness, and I try not to struggle as I swing on the fragile thread. With short shallow breaths I whisper "You will not prevail. Your master has been defeated. He is nothing but a rabid dog on a short chain". The laughter is replaced by a scream and a cavernous mouth yawns open and sharp teeth pierce my flesh.
I wake up to the sterile white of a hospital room. I try to sit up and the room seems to spin. A nurse hurries over, Sir please don't move. You have been badly hurt. There is a man here who would like to speak with you, do you feel well enough to talk?
I carefully sink back into the pillow, and a man in an expensive Italian suit begins to speak. "Good afternoon Mr. Hai, I represent Mr. Xion. I express my sincere apologies, I understand you were visiting Mr. Xion when the incident happened". I respond softly, trying not to move my jaw, "What incident?". He cleared his throat and continued, "it seems you received several deep lacerations from a fountain pen. You received 51 stitches. Your starched dress shirt collar may have saved your life." He bent closer, we are sparing no expense in finding the person who did this and will not rest until they are brought to justice. Until then, here is my card. All of your medical expenses will be paid for, and when you feel well enough we can talk more about the compensation package we are offering.
I'm sure you realize that Mr. Xion is quite upset about the incident, and we would prefer to avoid any publicity that would only complicate things. Here is my card, please do not hesitate to call me day or night. Mr. Xion has put me at your disposal, and he will contact you daily to monitor your recovery. Please rest now Mr. Hai, you are in good hands. With a polite bow Mr. Xion left the room and softly closed the door behind him.
Thanks so much for reading my ending, you can see the rest of the endings here, thanks @f3nix! https://steemit.com/contest/@bananafish/finish-the-story-contest-week-22
Fountain pen image from Unsplash https://unsplash.com/photos/cw2ai6A_eeM
Amazing and very insteresting history, surely a great piece of work my friend!. Supported, upvoted and resteemed! :D
Thank you for your kind comments, I appreciate it @reinaldoverdu
Hahaha that was a bit unexpected
Many descriptive parts are masterful!
I had the same sensation many times when dreaming with high fever.
The very ending is worrying!
Thanks for the comment, from the prompt it seemed the main character was "bringing a knife to a gun fight". In this story a bed spring was used instead of a pen. http://news.stlpublicradio.org/post/heard-exorcist-st-louis-event-inspired-it#stream/0
A wonderfully foreboding ending - I just love it!
Thanks @Calluna for the kind comment. Congrats to you also on your Curie vote. :-)
Hi giddyupngo,
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Thank you @cutie, you are really boosting many hopes and dreams on Steemit. You are appreciated!
Congratulations for your coming back with this powerful piece. I loved the strength of the dialogues and it's so true that the pen is mightier than the sword! Mr. Hai is in good hands, but no prayers when Mr. Xioin's around..
Thanks @f3nix, I am happy it all came together, you are appreciated!
Amazing storytelling as always!!!
there you are :)
Thank you for the cute video, how awesome of you. :-)
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Congratulations on being curied!!!!!! You deserve it so so much! I don'tn't even notice the time passing when reading your stories.
Thank you for your encouragement, it means a lot to me. Take care!
@giddyupngo Thank you for not using bidbots on this post and also using the #nobidbot tag!