FiftyWords: Mommy's Lemonade (Micro Fiction)
"A cold lemonade filled with Vitamin C. The best cure for you."
Hi again in a new #fiftywords story, the prompt this time is Lemon, I didn't know what to write at first but after looking at some other entries I instantly got this idea.
Mommy's Lemonade
"My neck hurts."
Mom made this lemonade for me then went to buy medicine earlier.
Doctor said to sleep my sickness away.
I slept all I can, but it only hurts more.
I'll sleep again, after I finish mommy's lemonade.
Where I live, the first thing we do when we have fever isn't going to the doctor, but making a lemon juice (lemonade.) It has some healing power!! but yeah we still need to get a real medicine. So I based this story on my illness days when I was a child... In this story I tried to use very simple language, words a child would use. Hope I did it right.
This story was 68 words at first, I'm glad I managed to include all the points of the original attempt into this final result.
It is short but i like this thanks for share.
Very nice, @ahmadmanga! And I love the backstory. Nicely done.
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Thanks for the reminder... Done!
My head went straight to munchausen by proxy...oi.
Looked it up and I'm still not sure if I understand this syndrome... Does it seem like what happened in my story?
Basically it's where someone poisons someone else to gain attention or gratitude for taking care of them. It's probably just me that thought of it when i read the story.
Ouch!! hopefully not... The mother will be irredeemably evil if she did that. (wait, that does seem like a good story too!!)
But thanks for mentioning it, now I learned something new :thumbsup: