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RE: Short Fiction: Bobbie Blade and the Mantis Shrimp
" Short fingers, heavy knuckled, fat, and strong all at once. The meat jerked and tore as the thin exoskeleton was removed and discarded with savage indifference. " - love it!
The Passive Voice Police might exhort you to say the meat jerked * as she removed * the exoskelton, not "was removed"
thanks and glad you enjoyed it. y'all have inspired me to go back over this one and clean it up.