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Chapter One: So it Begins
Chapter Two: Into the Dark
Chapter Three: Confounded by a Lock of Stone
Chapter Four: The Ponderous Path Home
Chapter Five: Fleeing the Immolation
Chapter Six: Weathering the Firestorm
Chapter Seven: An Aftermath of Exhaustion and Cinders
Chapter Eight: The Bitter Cold Night That Lasted a Month
Chapter Nine: Deals with the Dav-Vel
Chapter Ten: The Dav-vel's Due
Chapter Eleven: Without a Solution
Chapter Twelve: With Potential
Chapter Thirteen
Chapter Fourteen: An Unsettled Union

Chapter Fifteen: An Unexpected Companion

Gates, fences, walls and domes had only certain amounts of utility on exoplanets. They might have kept out the large animals or their alien equivalents. They might have kept out some interactions between microbes and parasites, though that was definitely not the case with Escheria. That world's ecology was far too insidious for mere domes, walls, fences and gates. On most worlds, they were helpful. Nowhere humanity had tread was the world exactly eden or perfectly compatible with Earthlife. The closest was Escheria and that was half the problem. The other half was normal Escherian ecological interactions were not the same as normal Terran ecological interactions whatsoever. Not even the highly advanced drones and bots and lasers and microwave weapons could have saved the Americans of Escheria from the hell they went through. But they had made a huge difference on Jefferson. The say was true on Madison. And Franklin. And Adams. And amongst the worlds of China and India and Europe and the rest of Earth Nations spreading themselves out amongst the stars.

Yet, no matter where they went, the peoples of Earth, no matter what new and brilliant technologies came out of India and China and Amerca and Nigeria, no matter what they created to protect themselves from the frightening alienness of the worlds they now claimed, none of that was any protection from the one thing that came with them. None of those would have or could have saved humanity from itself.

Or from the snooping intervention of little sisters.

Tobias, Tristan and I had met at the gate out of the settlement. We had tried to be discrete in our discreetness, or at least as discrete as we could be while we were attempting to be discreet. All of us had avoided each other for more than a day. All of us had merely tinked at one another only. Albeit in Tristan's case, it was like he opened a firehose just to say 'hullo.' All of us had gathered we needed and brought that to the gate.

In Tristan's case, he'd been preparing for some time. It took him a bit longer without help and, to be honest, he was our cybernetic centaur: he integrated with a purpose built four-legged bot he could sit in and it would encompass up to his waist. We named it that because he looked like one when he was integrated with it. However, the bot could become bipedal as needed, but it could not carry cargo then. It even had its own robotic arms. All controlled through Tristan's booster.

Tristan had made sure his family didn't know about it. Or about what he had taken to it for cargo. Tobias and I had dropped off our own necessities. Tristan had insisted on loading them himself. Which he did. Very quickly and efficiently: being mentally linked to a centaur exoskeleton generally helps. As well as having the mental agility and flexibility to interface with four arms as well as four legs.

And yet, Tristian's little sister, the kiddo that had taken care of her older brother, stuck up for him, made sure he was okay and loved him to death, had still figured out something was up and where it was going to go down. There she was sitting on top of the gate, in her obnoxious 13 year old barely a teenager and let me check that ID card again, please, trying to act far too cool for her own good.

Discretion, drones, walls, gates, robots, encryption, direct brain to brain contact, none of that was any good at protecting against the snooping of little sisters.

Because there she was. And she was unforgivably quoting Monty Python.

With wildly inappropriate, constipated visual imagery.

She was obnoxious and gross and had us caught. She was simply Cecilia. She could have been no other because she would have screwed that up. No one else could have been her because they could not have even aspired to even been a mockery of her. Cecilia was...Cecilia.

And she made me grind my teeth.

She hopped down from the gate - without getting hurt - no small feat, but that might have been because of the size of her toad hoppers and walked right up hugged her brother. Then she got into a staring match with Tobias who gave her the dirtiest glare short of a latrine until she moved so close their noses were almost touching and then she kissed his nose.

I was sure I was steaming so much that any and all frozen forms of water near me had melted within a 3 m radius. They had converted, flashed to steam and burst away. I am sure you would have seen the effect: Immie companies would have loved it and over used it to death and into zombiedom.

Cecilia sauntered over to me, almost stomping in her thick heeled Frankenstein boots with her long coat of smart and gave me a smirk. Then she winked. And commented that I was cute when I was mad. Could I get cuter still?

The little twerpette!

Never mind she was as tall as I was.

That made it worse.

She loved her brother. He might have been adopted, but she fiercely loved and protected and cherished him. Cecilia had never, ever been jealous or unhappy with Tristan. She had always been right by him and had always been there for him. Since the very first day he had been adopted by her family.

She was making it plain that she was in no way, no how going to let her precious older brother off with two troublemakers like Tobias and I. Uh uh, no.

She ran her hand over her cross cropped hair and scratched the back of her head. She took a deep breath, exhaled and pretended not to choke a bit on the smoky ash still in the air. She stretched, dramatically, and then through her bright black eyes and her perfectly thin arched eyebrow asked where we were all going.

Including her.

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Hi anzha, this was first time i came across your story. I must said that when first read from middle of the story i was lost. i didn't know what was the cause 3 of them want to sail, and how they met. But after i continue to read on the story, you have write it so well until it attracted my attention. I love how you build your story and progress it. It was smart of you put in your previous chapter URL for people like me who would like to read from start.

How long you have started this story? After this comment, I have to start read from chapter 1..

hi oliviackl.

Thank you for the complement.

I've been working on the story for about 18 weeks. I write a chapter for it once per week. I have two other stories that are in progress: Cliffs of Uptala and High Noon on Jefferson. HNoJ is a sequel to the Dawn on Jefferson story I wrote for my daughter. That story was edited and placed on steemit as well, but it was aimed at a 12 yo audience.

The Maze of Madison is an experiment. I am trying really hard to keep true to it, but I don't know if anyone has noticed what that experiment is though.

The Cliffs of Utpala are an attempt to write nonAmerican characters. I wish I had more feedback from Indian readers about whether or not they were remotely accurate.

The Jefferson stories are meant to be the equivalent of Percy Jackson. My daughter loves Riordan. However, I wanted to have fun stories with some deeper meaning. At least for a tween/early teen.

Your daughter so fortunate, are you a profesional writer? You wrote a lot of stories wow.. I haven't finished all the chapter yet. But can say that i enjoy it very much and i no need to wait for a week to have another chapter yay!! because all already there.. But i have to wait for the new chapter. The two books you mention. Do yoh plan to post in steemit?

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I am not a professional as yet. I work with computers, actually.

They are on steemit. Remember that the completed one (Dawn on Jefferson) is aimed at a younger crowd. Cliffs of Utpala is up to chapter 14. High Noon on Jefferson is at chapter 13.

If you didn't say it, no one knew you not a writer but a IT guy. So writing is your hobby? I also in IT, but writing would be a challenge for me. I love to read. I read a lot of fictions. You start to write when some ideas hit you or you research on intersting topic and convey it in a form of story?

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I started to write a while back just for fun. But nothing I wrote was more than a few pages. However, I had been strongly encouraged to become a writer since high school.

What a totally field writer and IT. But it feel good because you still persue your interest. As for me, my interest is account but end up with IT also. Maybe this is life. Continue your interest @anzha, with what i read, you not far from a professional writer. Gambateh!!

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Very well described story, like the moment when you paid attention to explain the details of that bacteria very well and the situation in different countries who were facing it. One of the human facing catastrophe and survivals story. Like the characters description and especially it was interesting to read about Tristan’s robot and of course his sister. Thoroughly worked out description and details of characters, that catch up the reader’s attention.

I like reading this chapter because you describe your characters so well, both physically and how they relate to each other. I also like that there's a permeating excitement from the way you write.
                     
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Thank you.

I'm still learning the craft and appreciate the encouragement.

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I wish I had more time to read the prior chapters as well as I like this one. I like how you build drama around his sister and then she asks where they were all going :D I know it was not to laugh but it made me laugh anyway. I was expecting something bad to happen and then she comes with this.

I like how you describe your characters and her love to her brother. It makes the story very interesting to read :)

Thank you for sharing and have a nice day!

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