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RE: The Friendship of Squirrel and Bear 🐿🐻💤
Dear Free Writer,
Let's continue our #wewrite journey. Keep in mind this is a learning experience for all of us and feedback is important. Have fun and don't forget to read your comments, they can be very useful. Below you find the review of your publication which is part of We-Write-Lesson 4.
| Criteria | Result |
|---|---|
| What went well - 1 point | 1 |
| What to improve | Tip: reread your text so you can read it with a fresh look. Bear and squirrel live together and not and next they do? |
| Misunderstanding | - |
| Title - 2 point | 1 |
| Hashtags - 1 points | 1 |
| A flashy start - 2 points | 2 |
| Creativity / out-of-the-box thinking - 3 points | 2 |
| Original/no AI text | 👍 |
| Following the rules - 1 point | 1 |
| Bonus - 1 point | 1 |
| Total max 11 points | 9 |
| Verification date: | October 5, 2024 |
Bonus reason: If you edit it a bit this makes a great children's (bedtime?) story.
The start of your story reminded me of the "Grasshopper and the Ant". It was good you wrote on because your tale became stronger and better. There was no need to add pictures for me but I can imagine if you tell it to children they love to see a few.
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Thank you very much for this input, it is true that sometimes when writing there are things that are forgotten even though they could be important things, I will improve it and be more detailed in writing,
Blessings to you.... 🤗😘
You can always edit the story, write some follow uos. For sure children will love to hear the adventures of this duo (sounds bear is the housewife and the roommate has the good life 🤣).