Quitting Life
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6 years ago in #quittinglife by tristancarax (66)
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Ahh I love this, a totally unique twist - you can't beat a good reptilian overlord! The idea that the option is purely for show is a great touch, to keep their little people hive ticking over. My mum always used to say, give people a choice and they will agree to all sorts of things (she mainly used that to get us to do things like put our seat belt on - do you want to do it or should I do it for you?) I also enjoy how closely monitored the little regime is, she didn't even need to deliver the form for them to come for her. The people disappearing under questionable circumstances is a good device to explain the human disconnect. A very enjoyable ending!
It just seemed to me like that is where the story was headed to where I took it when you wrote about the place being sealed because of something happening x amount of years ago. Reminds me of a movie I can't name right now.
I'll have to remember your mother's saying.
I like the fact that you refused to be subject to the binary imprinting implicit in the first half of the story. This shows a critical lively mind and strikes one of the main points of the contest. Well done!
I liked the pill thing. It reminded me of keeping one under control, but it doesn't always work as one might need a larger dose after a while. The seed was planted in her long ago by the memories she kept so it could be possible to say, "You know what? Fuck this place." 8-)
Nice twist at the end! A bee who doesn't work anymore, is no longer useful for the hive
They are so sick they cannot simply let her go. They got to play games. What a world!
Week #19 emerged from the shadows.. good luck, brave storyteller!