Last Night in Japan | Original Poetry

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It was just for one night
in that dimly lit izakaya
that his blood pressure was elevated to
the dizzying heights of Nanda Devi
the snowy summit that he used to climb.

Booze blew through his nostrils
as he drank one too many shots
of sake and wrapped his arms around
a woman with an ivory face —
the white paint of which he did not peel away
with his fingertips before that night.

But the paint was peeling and
the flakes were falling
from the wall in the master bedroom that night
where his wife was still on her knees,
praying that Mr. Sakhoby will have safety
on his business trip —
she did not rest her aching joints
on satin sheets.

Hers was not the only sheets left untouched,
for out in the streets that very night
was his firstborn — and only — son
biking around in the back alleys
with his newly adopted blood brothers
and getting his first taste of ecstasy —
to jump out of the marbled cell and fly away.

Neither Mrs. nor Sakhoby Jr. knew
how in that night his blood pressure shot up
in a flurry of ecstatic kisses, and how
in the land where the sun rises he could do nothing
but leave before the cock crowed.


This was an original poem exploring the intersection between family disintegration and substance abuse.


Upvotes and comments are always appreciated! ❤️

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Beautiful and poignant.
Selffishness is the first ingredient of desintegration and everything falls after that.
Beautiful images, very elegant depiction of what otherwise might have been a nasty element in the equation. It is certainly one of the most damaging.
May none of our kids go through the hells of drug abuse and all the evils that accompany it.

@hlezama TOTALLY AGREE. Selfishness is the first ingredient, when everyone wants their own way the familial structure falls apart.

I write this in the hopes that it will stir people to avoid that evil.

The way your poetry flows is amazing, @joeylim! Transitions like this...

a woman with an ivory face —
the white paint of which he did not peel away
with his fingertips before that night.

But the paint was peeling and
the flakes were falling
from the wall in the master bedroom that night
where his wife was still on her knees,

... are not easy to do well (in my experience, anyway), and you've used them here with great success. Wonderful, evocative, prose, and...
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Awwww THANK YOU @traciyork ((': <3

Do you write poems too?

You're very welcome, @joeylim! And I do the occasional poem here and there - my last attempts were a bunch of (intentionally) silly haikus. 😊

WOW!
Well done, @joeylim This was visceral and very real!
I enjoyed it.

Thanks @thekittygirl for presenting this on @pypt #pypt

@bluefinstudios Thank you!! I felt sad in the midst of writing too.

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Thanks @julianhorack, I should remember to use the #creativecoin tag next time!! (:

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Awww thanks @steemitbloggers! ❤️
This really means alot to me. ((':

It's well deserved! wow

I agree! Fabulous work.

A potent poem here my friend!
Blessings!

Have a blessed day too @papilloncharity!! (:

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Nicely expressed poetry @joeylim well done!

Thanks Joan!! (:

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