Steemit Open Mic Week 67 - "El Reloj'' - Original Song

in #openmic8 years ago

Hello Steemit!

This is my submission for this week , I am in the middle of taking my studio apart since I'll be moving to Ecuador for a month , taking a little vacation but still have some work to do , so I'll be over there for some time . Good to be home , get some energy and come back with more energy for this year's projects!

This week's song I composed some months ago and I've been coming back to it from time to time ,I have a little love/hate relationship with this one . Some part of me feels it's still incomplete ,but oh well , as i play it back I get little ideas each time , kind of like downloading the song really slowly .

This song is called ''El reloj'' ( The clock ) and talks about the feelings of a soon-to-be mother , her fears , thoughts until her child is finally born and her world changes.

''In her cross , time is born as she breaks the clock.. finally a word will break with her silence''

I hope you like it!

Here are the lyrics:

''El Reloj''
(P.Mena)

Sus manos un espejo
Que oyen el reflejo
De voces en su cuerpo
en soledad
Un vientre que amanece
entre poemas que crecen
Lloran en tu pecho
en soledad

De su luz sale el sol
De su cruz ,nace el tiempo
al quebrar el reloj

En su sombra
escapan mis miedos
una palabra romperá
con el silencio

Los llantos del pasado
la han abandonado
Ella salta en su sueño
en claridad

Hoy sigue a su frente
a una mano que se extiende
la salva de su propia oscuridad

Here's a translation:

''The Clock''
(P.Mena)

Her hands a mirror
that hear the reflection
of voices in her body
in solitude
A womb that turns to day
between poems that grow
They cry in her chest
In solitude

From her light, the sun rises up
From her cross , time is born
as she breaks the clock

In her shadow
my fears escape
one word will break
with her silence

The tears from the past
have abandoned her
And she jumps to hear dreams
in clarity
Today she follows her north
to a hand that reaches to her
and saves her from her own darkness

Big props to @luzcypher and @pfunk once again for setting this up! It's always a joy to play for this community!

Thanks for reading and listening!
I'll see you from Ecuador next time!

Pechiche Mena

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love your work my friend great song great sound. just lovely

Thank you very much @soundlegion! I'm glad you liked it ! I struggle a little bit with this one! but i like the story behind it :) .Thank you for your kind words!

Nice one bro. Love your sound

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Thank you very much @luzcypher! I'm really glad you liked it :)

Love it my friend. It's beautiful, deep and touching. I wish you a safe and easy journey to Ecuador! cheers

Thank you very much @nirtsfaty , I'm glad you liked it :) . this is an odd song for me but I seem to grow into liking it little by little :p ! Thanks for your wishes , Im already in Ecuador , having a nice relaxing time :) !

Nice work even though you feel you're wrestling with this one, Pechiche! Have an enjoyable vacation and visit with your family, my friend!

Thank you very much my brother @passion-ground! I'm certainly having a nice time over here visiting my family :) . Right now I'm at my mom's , catching up! cheers my bro!

Tremenda letra hermano, calidad tu canción.

Muchas gracias Hermano :) . Me alegro que te haya gustado!

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