Steemit Open Mic Week #102 - El Faro - Original Song.

in #openmic6 years ago

Hello Steemit !

This is my entry for week 102 , on a composition that translates to ''the lighthouse'' .. I composed a very raw version for the Steemit songwriter challenge last year but lately I found myself humming the melody quite often and out of nowhere.. so i thought the song came for a visit .. as I read back the lyrics It kinda made sense to me many months later.. so I reworked it a little.. and here it is :) .. songs sometimes evolve naturally over time.

'El Faro"
(P.Mena)
Temprano sucedió
a solas en un faro
la muerte se escapó
Se ha ido en otro barco

La vela se voló
se entrega a la deriva
su manto los cubrió
se dieron a la orilla

La vida , un beso
Se va en un momento
Pero el tiempo no borró

Las horas de los dias
que se fueron hoy
La duda de este tiempo
Que se fue en su voz

La lluvia que se escapa
de la luz de Dios
Las sombras que descansan
viven en su sol

Here's a translation:

''The Lighthouse''
(P.Mena)
It happened very early
by myself in a lighthouse
Death has escaped
it has left in another ship

The sail has flown away
it gave in and it is adrift
It's mantle covered them
and gave in to the shore

Life is just a kiss
It's gone in a moment
But time has not erased

The hours inside days
That just left today
The doubt in this time
that has gone away with their voices

The rain that escapes
from the light of God
The shadows that now rest
in their own sun

Thanks for listening

Pechiche Mena

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Me requeteencanta....
todos los cambios de acordes, las armonías....

el estribillo me encanta como fuye y me se ha quedado todos estos días.... he intentado "harmonize a steemian" y uf, complicado, esas séptimas :)

Bueno, con esta ya... no? Pris enciende otra velita!

jajajajaja <3<3

no quemes el estudio !

Muy chévere, Pechiche. Genial. Un saludo.

Muchas gracias Siomara ! perdon que te respondí tarde! gracias por pasarte a escuchar! Un abrazo!

I know you already know this but I'll remind you anyway. You are awesome, pechiiiii!!!! <3

hahaha @hiddenblade thank you very much :) .. right back at youuu !

nice song nice singing . you are a very good singer

Beautiful lyrics and performance. I like the flow when there are the back voices combined with yours. Keep on creating! :)

Thank you @gabchik! I haven't seen you in a while :) ! I hope you are doing fine .. thank you for stopping for a visit and the lovely comment !

SososoSOOO beautiful, Pechi! 💜 Your voice is so very soothing and your harmonies are just the most delicious sound — so perfectly layered and lovely. ⭐️ Thank you for sharing your exceptional gifts with all of us. 🙌🏼

Zippy zipssss <3 .. Thank youssss ! I thought I had overdone it a little on this one with the harmonies hahaha.. I'm glad you liked it ! Sending big hugs and choco cookiesssss !

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