I feel like as an introduction post, this lacks information ;
I can understand you are new to steemit, but im sure you can do better ; you should tell your readers about what brought you to steemit ; and the reason you joined, and what your plans are as well as your goals, explain your intentions and motives and let people know more about you - i have recently started up a few of my own business' as i have been helping others build their own online empire .

Some have gone to video games and stream them or put them on youtube, some have started their own affiliate market place on different platforms of social media, one of my clients is writing a book about spirituality and going on tour in the new year !

I feel like you will do fantastic on this platform, although i feel like youll need to work on your information in your posts a little bit ; especially if its an introduction post . some people take a week or two to explore the platform and see how other people have done their introduction posts ; as well as adding a few extra tags .

You should look into things a little bit more and re-do your intro post later down the road ; add replies to other conversations and try to build up a follower base before making an intro post, youll get much more views on your post if people know who you are a little bit before actually introducing yourself .

Anyway - i thought i would just give a few useful tips ; feel free to follow me and read up on my blog !
and WELCOME TO STEEMIT !~