Wakening
When the sleeping girl awoke, the whole world was a mess.
The outside walls were crumbling and the halls were lined with dirt. Contracted muscles stretched and sent pain coursing through her legs as she explored the ruins.
She walked past the dust-coated mirrors with cobwebs in their corners and the porcelain shards of teacups scattered on the floor.
The dimness shadowed her in grey as she continued forward. Her movements split the stuffy air; her footsteps broke the silence.
Then faintly in the distance, there came another sound. So quiet but still real, the sound of leaves and wind.
She followed her instincts and moved toward its source until she reached a window draped in curtains that billowed in the breeze.
Pushing the fabric aside, she let the light in.
She didn't know what year it was but saw that it was morning.
Inspired by the 5 Minute Freewrite Prompt - Awakening posted by the lovely @mariannewest!
Ellie your narrative voice is spectacular. I love this in the way it is complete and yet so open to the readers' imaginations.
In a piece that begins in such a desolate place, this left me with hope for the future. A lot to pack into so short a piece. Well done!
This is such an incredible compliment, especially coming from someone so talented.
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Love your last line!!!
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Better to know when the crops grow than to know how long ago.
Morning is when the crops grow best.
Both of these things are very true!
I like to imagine her as a wise goddess, awakened to fix this mess of a world!
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-81-5-minute-freewrite-prompt-i-floss-my-tears
I love this interpretation!
That's a good take on Rip van Winkle or Sleeping Beauty.
We do what we can. And the morning always comes.
Thank you so much!
This is the truth. Morning always comes.
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Excellent story, it was a great read. My mind is wandering, how does she not know the year. Cool Ellie.
My first thought for the prompt was the story of Sleeping Beauty, but I didn't want to tell a tale that had already been told.
This is just a girl who happened to sleep for a very long time!
Ooo, intriguing start! I hope you expand on this freewrite - there are so many interesting possible directions to go from here! Well done!
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You're so right, waking up is just the beginning!
Nice work, it seems she was in a coma... Lovely work
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I love your writing skills so much! 💚
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Very nice freewrite. You are an excellent writer:-)
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