Weekend Freewrite - Train to Nowhere

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This is a hybrid free write, part fiction and part altered childhood memories, but taken from the prompts.

It is shorter than my usual posts, as I took the five minute timers seriously, and apart from editing for syntax and taking about five additional minutes to end it, there you go. So the whole thing took about 45 minutes including a couple of interruptions.

I've been wanting to get back into the free writes for a while, but my schedule has been so weird that it simply didn't allow for it recently. So, if I'm not mistaken, this is my second free write of the official free writes.

Weekend Freewrite: 13 April 2019

I am waking to the station to catch a train that will take me home.

Or, at least the closest approximation of “home” that still exists. but then, “home” was always a myth.

I am not even sure why I want to return, as there is no one that I care about still there, nothing holding me, nothing even all that interesting to me, and yet here I am. Returning to nothing.

It wasn’t always this way, but then, what is? Once, it was a real home, with friends, loved ones, and a sense of belonging.

No more.

So why do I return? I am really at a loss as to my own reasons. The mystery, it seems, is really me.

Of course, that’s what my mom said years ago, when my logic was entirely different than that of my elder sisters. My mom and I were more alike, but even she, though she knew me best, was sometimes at a loss.

But she is gone now, as are they, as is everyone I knew.


“I think they’ve gone,” Marie said, her head turned, her breath hot in my ear.

No shit, Sherlock. Marie has a way of stating the obvious. But then, she doesn’t know what I know.

I’m not even sure why I asked her to come with me. Moral support? Companionship? She isn’t great at either, but then again, neither am I.

I think, in the end, being with someone, even Marie, is better than being alone with my thoughts. Which is ironic, as we travel mostly in silence, each keeping our thoughts mostly to ourselves.

What amazingly contrary creatures we humans can be. Especially when traveling back in time, so to speak, to a home that, in reality, no longer exists.

The train is late, only by a few minutes, a minor annoyance in an already excruciating day. I wonder yet again how I even set myself upon this course, why I am doing this to myself, and whether, in the end, any of it even matters.

Still, here I am. With Marie. Waiting for a train that we can now hear, but not yet see. Waiting.


The train slowed and stopped as we gathered our sparse belongings and climbed aboard, greeted by a young conductor, the red mark on his face remarkable only in how it failed to detract from his friendly demeanor.

“The conductor sings his song again,” I think to myself, noting that he is nothing like the old black conductors of my childhood or the song; like Mr. Christmas, who always made me and my sisters look forward to every trip on the El Capitan.

But the El Cap is long gone too, yet another train that steamed off into history, like the Super Chief and the L&N and the City of New Orleans.

Upon taking our seats, Marie whipped out her iPod, and her ear buds stifled any conversation we might have had, but then, I’m not in the mood to talk anyway.

I stared out the window and then dozed off.

It was getting light when I awakened, surprised that I slept for so long, and Marie was still sleeping. I ate the meal I brought with me, and when Marie woke up, offered her some food, which she took and ate.

A couple of hours more, and we reached our destination, then grabbed our bags and walked across the street to pick up our rental car.

Marie was quiet as she settled into the passenger seat, and nothing more was said as I pulled into traffic and drove across town to where my childhood home once stood, in a once-quiet neighborhood that has since become an Asian commercial mecca.

The old landmarks are mostly gone, though Sumitomo Bank is still there, bigger than ever, as is the anachronistic pseudo-Hawai’ian thatched-hut sign posts announcing the neighborhood next to mine.

We climbed the hill, turned right, and then left, marveling at the variety of small businesses and franchises that now dominate the once-residential street. This used to be the kind of place where kids could play outside until all hours and their parents never worried, because they didn’t have to . . . everyone watched out for everyone else’s kids. It was a real neighborhood.

Then I came to a stop. This is it. It doesn’t look like it, but the address is right, and so is the roofline.

I sighed.

The Russian olive trees that my mom planted when we moved in, a long line of them along the south property line, that I have fond memories of climbing as a kid, should have been huge by now. But they are all gone.

Ditto the bamboo and gardenias in the front yard, all the fruit trees my mom planted; peaches, nectaries, guavas and natal plums, lemons and more, all gone.

Wait, not all . . . I can see one large tree, towering over the roof of the building, and with a start I realize that that is the macadamia nut tree my mom planted when we moved into the house! We lived here for ten years, and macadamias can easily take that long to bear nuts, and sure enough, here it is . . . and it’s loaded with nuts.

Somehow, in this abysmal day, in this abysmal time of my life, this makes everything okay. My mom would have been thrilled to know that the tree made it, that it’s still healthy, and that it’s finally producing nuts.

I hope these people realize the bounty that’s available to them.

“Marie, you want to grab a bite to eat? If it’s still around, I used to know a great Thai place nearby, and if not, there should still be something good around here.”

Marie turned slowly, and considered my changed mood for a moment, as if she didn’t believe her good fortune. “Sure,” she said finally. “Thai would be great.”

My thanks to @mariannewest and @carolkean for leading by example and making me want to take part in this freewrite. ;-)

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So glad that you are back with a working laptop. And so happy that you did a freewrite - that yard sounded a lot like mine and I often wonder what the next owner will do with all the fruit trees and such...



I had a similar situation when I moved from Florida. We bought the house in 1999, and I gardened there from our split until moving to Tennessee in 2011, leaving it with an established rare plant garden and food forest, including lots of chayas, and the two best pink grapefruit trees ever. I wish I knew their variety, because there were sweet and delicious, and were already mature and bearing when we bought the place.

From what I've been told, and witnessed the one time I've been back since, they ripped out the majority of the plants, never even realizing what they had. Sad.

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Such a wonderful and heartfelt recollection. I can't believe you could write something so skillfully descriptive and in such a short time.

Your feelings took me back to a few years ago when I didn't quite know why but I went back to the street and whole area of my childhood to find that the old federation house with stained glass windows with beautiful gardens, that I had lived in all my childhood and teens, was gone and replaced by a concrete mausoleum style of house.

One peppercorn tree on the nature-strip had survived or rather had shot from the original that used to grow by the side of the house. Which was the one thing that warmed my heart. ♥︎♥︎⚖️♥︎♥︎


;-)What can I say, I'm naturally verbose. ;-)

But I so feel you.

The reality, unfortunately, is that when my childhood best friend and I actually revisited our childhood homes, I didn't recognize a single tree or plant that was there in my youth.

The lush jungle that my mother planted and nurtured was gone. The new owners had cut down everything, covered it all in concrete, and even covered the gorgeous oak hardwood floors with wall-to-wall carpet. Sigh.

And when we visited her home, which was twice the size of mine, her first comment was, "It's so little!!!"

It's amazing what a difference there is in perspective between childhood and adulthood.

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This is so beautiful - I would have sworn I commented on this already but apparently no. This:

...being with someone, even Marie, is better than being alone with my thoughts. Which is ironic, as we travel mostly in silence, each keeping our thoughts mostly to ourselves. What amazingly contrary creatures we humans can be. Especially when traveling back in time, so to speak, to a home that, in reality, no longer exists.

You strike the right balance of introspection and forward motion of the story as the train takes the narrator home. What a perfect metaphor, he macadamia nut tree, immature when they left home, but now in its prime, delivering a bounty of nuts (and the new owners, hopefully, are reaping it). You are such a poet - able to convey so much with so few words. All your haiku writing is building poetry muscle! This is a deft story and I look forward to more. Find the time somehow please - you have the talent! The stories! The messages, the metaphors, the words. Now, the minutes in a day. :)

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