He got clean or not?! /fiftywords

in #fiftywords5 years ago

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"I promise not to go back again. I have been clean for a month." His eyes pleaded.

She looked at the druggie of a husband grovelling at her door. He had hurt them enough.

She slammed the door on him.

Weeks later, she saw him at the joint, wasted away.

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"He had hurt them enough"

Your choice of the word "them" instead of "her" added so much depth, alluding to his own self-destruction as well as the pain he caused her. Nice touch.

Interesting! My interpretation was that they have children. But I see now that your interpretation works just as well. Literature is, of course, always up to the interpretation so the readers!

As I found out when I heard a mom-friend share her interpretation of The Giving Tree.

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This is very powerful, @wems. You captured the conflict well: the decision the character must make to turn her back on her self-destructing husband. It's clear she has given him many chances, and can no longer trust him to keep his word. Well done.

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