"Faith" an original work of fiction for the #365daysofwriting: sci-fi in precisely #fiftywords

in fiftywords •  3 months ago

This is day 72 of @mydivathings' #365daysofwriting. Every day @mydivathings invites you to write a short story based on the image she chooses. Today's image (below) is a Photo by David Clarke on Unsplash

Find out more about the challenge (you can join anytime!) here https://steemit.com/365daysofwriting/@mydivathings/day-72-365-days-of-writing-challenge

Today, I thought I would write another short story in exactly #fiftywords.

The shields on the main doors were breaking down. Metal rippled, buckled and melted under the intense power of their weaponry.

“Why did I listen to you, Kelvin? It’ll be easy, Mac. We’ll just jack their ship, Mac.

Kelvin, urgently tapping commands into the console, grinned.

“Have some faith, man.”

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Fantastic use of the name, Kelvin. I like the 2nd sentence also. Very strong, and imparts an immediate sense of urgency. I would like to have seen an Oxford comma, but that's a personal choice. The ending reminded me of Dennis Johnson's Jesus & Sons. Thanks for Sharing. I'm writing sci fi, too. Think this is a great platform for it. Brand New Here. This is my first comment.

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Great first comment, so gave you a big thank you upvote! I used to put more oxford commas in (that was how I was taught), but lately I have used them less. Particularly, in shorter work, it looks a bit crowded. Thanks for reading and commenting: a great start!

I have written a #zapfic story based on the same situation, but from a different perspective. You can find it here: https://steemit.com/zapfic/@felt.buzz/-trick-track-an-original-work-of-zappl-fiction-zapfic-a-story-in-232-characters-or-less

Love it, a story in 50 words... you did a great job with it, it feels complete unto itself. Impressive work :)

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Thank you! I like the challenge! Today I wrote a story in 99 words, but I wanted to make it more tricky so I wrote it in 3 parts, each exactly 33 words long. If you like you can find the first part here you'll find a link in the comments to the next one, if you want to continue... :)