A lovely take on 'the boy who cried wolf', @therosepatch. I really like the anthropomorphized take of the wolves, that's a great idea. The emotional weight of was gripping too.
I really wish though there had been a moment at the moment of her exile to get a better sense if Reyni's thoughts. It felt a little matter-of-fact and abrupt. What was she feeling when Orion gave her Mercy? Perhaps she was in shock, feeling nothing or unable too, and just left as an automatic response. But still...
As I was writing it, I got the feeling that she was kinda numb emotionally by then. She was expecting death, almost welcoming it, and didn't really know how to process the banishment. Then almost immediately after she was thrust into loneliness and near-starvation.
AHHHHH! I remember you talkin about this in the block but forgot about this. This is so good! I’m a bit of a sucker for wolf stories though, that’s all I read in Elementary school. Jack London was bae.
It’s nice to see @tanglebranch’s sheep getting a cameo :P
just amazing. I am following you to read the next parts.
Thank you!
Very nice start, @therosepatch! This is so intriguing. I look forward to finding out what happens next!
Thank you, @jayna! You'll find out soon enough :D
Absolutely excellent work here, Rose. Great work with the writing and editing and a well-deserved curie vote.
Thank you very much, @bex-dk :)
Fantastic job with the first chapter. I enjoyed the depth you created with your descriptions. All round, just a really well written story :) Gg
I loved this story from the beginning, was great to see how it evolved under your capable hands into this gem of a story!
I love the story too, thank you. It was fun to write :)
Great work. Looking forward to seeing how this progresses. I've followed you to be sure :)
Is that a Curie I see? If so, congratulations!
Thanks @johnkingwriter! And thanks for the follow! Part 2 should be up within the next day or so :D
A lovely take on 'the boy who cried wolf', @therosepatch. I really like the anthropomorphized take of the wolves, that's a great idea. The emotional weight of was gripping too.
I really wish though there had been a moment at the moment of her exile to get a better sense if Reyni's thoughts. It felt a little matter-of-fact and abrupt. What was she feeling when Orion gave her Mercy? Perhaps she was in shock, feeling nothing or unable too, and just left as an automatic response. But still...
Either way, I'm looking forward to the next part!
As I was writing it, I got the feeling that she was kinda numb emotionally by then. She was expecting death, almost welcoming it, and didn't really know how to process the banishment. Then almost immediately after she was thrust into loneliness and near-starvation.
I love this story. It's been great to watch your progress on this from first draft to final version too. Great work!
Thank you very much! And thank you for your help in getting it to the final version!
AHHHHH! I remember you talkin about this in the block but forgot about this. This is so good! I’m a bit of a sucker for wolf stories though, that’s all I read in Elementary school. Jack London was bae.
It’s nice to see @tanglebranch’s sheep getting a cameo :P
Thanks, caleb! Wolf stories are fun, but this was actually my first time writing one. I love how it came out :)
My first novel (11 years old lolz) was about a wolf. So yeah, the middle schooler in me approves!
Nice story development. Waiting to see where you take this. Have followed.