No joke. Be ruthless, relentless. Would you read this? Critique my query letter!
I wrote a book and have been editing it for awhile. I need a query letter for a literary agent.
My difficulty is that, there are multiple character POVs, not just 2.
There's also two main narratives in the book. The first one, by chapters, is occupied by Thars, Dhakita and others. The second narrative encompasses the prologue/epilogue and the intro to each part fo the book (part 1,2,3,4). Not sure how to explain this in a query letter, if at all.
Earth has been left behind and the remnants of humanity survive in colonies scattered throughout the solar system. All colonies are unique, though none are pleasant. Fusang may be the worst.
Thars Ankar is a VR tech producing illegal simulations. From trips to the zoo to murder sims, he’s made them all. When he steals memories to create Fusang’s latest shocking memdoc, he attracts fatal attention. Now, he’s forced to produce of memdoc for a sadistic crime lord, one that could reveal something so horrific that the system’s rulers would kill to stop it.
Dhakita Orleone is an enforcer for Fusang’s largest smuggling operation. Addicted to amphetamines, her boss demands she take time off to kick her habit. She agrees to one last easy job on the side. When it goes sour, she’s entangled in a conspiracy and caught between revolution and loyalty. Dhakita must make a decision that will change Fusang forever.
Thars and Dhakita must navigate between criminal syndicates, Venusian mutants, Old World revolutionaries and worst that humanity has to offer, meeting a dynamic entourage of characters on the way. They learn the reason Fusang’s known as “Hell in Space”.
CAPTIVES is a 100,000-word science fiction novel.