Poem / Burning sensation
Burning sensation
Burning sensations in my head
All because I hurt my leg
I was trying to be smart
And ended up falling off my path
The speed was a bit to fast
I'm lucky I didn't end up in a cast
I took the first corner fine
But realized my mistake
I was out of time
I had three options
A stopped car
A brick wall
Or a short strip of pavement
I chose the pavement
It was less costly and I left my engravement
More fortunately I never go out unkitted
The muscles in my sides and shoulder would've unstitched
I only tore through an old pair jeans
And put some scrapes on my knees
I'm just grateful that there was some divine intervention
I slid for more than 18 meters, I learnt my lesson
I'm also glad I had a dual-sport
If I were on my super-sport I'd have ended my life extra short
The damage wasn't even that bad either
I drove home fixed my knee
Re-aligned my forks, decided that corners are not meant for speed
By Ethan
2017/08/20
Were you writing about something that happened to you? If so I hope you're all right. If it was just a poem then you did a fabulous job of relating an incident. Either way it felt real so your poem did what it was meant to do. Good job! :D
A poem that is very congenial comrade @xxsenpaixsamaxx, what will you be chasing a friend, lol
I was trying to catch up to my dad on my bike and messed up.
Very beautiful poem. For such a minuscule thing, you wrote a long poem, and somehow managed to not make it monotonous and repetitive. Well done, and thank you for sharing! :)
PS: If you are interested and have some spare time, I have some poetry on my blog too. :)
Thank you :) I'll check out your stuff in the morning :D if you ever want me to see anything just drop me a link.
Thank you so much! :) Do you have Steemit Chat?
Nice one
Your poems are about life and life itself
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STOPThis poem might be written on a general incident, but I am from those people who take everything so deep and I always find another meaning to everything. Just like here, when I was reading it, I thought you were talking about the journey of life, where we get scratches, we get stressed (Burning sensations in my head), running for things, catching up a pace but then realizing life is not about the aim but the journey, and so much more, I can go on and on in my head full of imagination. Haha, If I din't read your comments I would never know that it was an incident. Good work, could have been even better if you related it to life. :P
I also write deep philosophical poetries. Have a look at my work if you like some food for thought.
Keep up the good work.
Will do, I'm glad you liked it. I wrote it in context to the incident but there was a meaning of life and learning from mistakes in there... I'm glad you spotted it :)
Haha. It's hard to trust you now :p But I would still do :D :D Keep it up.