My Poem About " Ukraine Women"

in Ukraine on Steem2 years ago (edited)

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"Ukraine Women"

EK Pabel


Ukraine women, with grace and fire,
Their beauty shines like the sun's bright spire,
With hearts full of passion, love, and pride,
Their spirit soars, never to be denied.

In their eyes, you see a fierce determination,
A will to survive and a strong foundation,
Forged in the face of adversity,
Their courage is a source of inspiration to all.

With their laughter and smile, they light up the room,
Their kindness and warmth dispels any gloom,
And in their embrace, you feel truly blessed,
For their love is the greatest gift, no less.

So here's to the women of Ukraine,
With strength, beauty, and love that sustains,
May they always be proud of their heritage,
And know that their place in our hearts is secure and sage.

With poise and elegance, they carry their head high,
Their spirit unbreakable, never to die,
Their strength and resilience a shining example,
Of the true beauty and power of a woman, incredible.

From the Carpathian Mountains to the Black Sea shore,
Their beauty and grace will forever endure,
With a love for their country, deep in their heart,
They embody the essence of Ukraine, an important part.

From traditional customs to modern ways,
They balance it all with poise and grace,
Their passion for life a true delight,
Making Ukraine women a true delight, so bright.

So here's to the women of Ukraine,
With a love for life and an unbreakable chain,
May they continue to inspire and shine,
For their beauty and spirit will always be divine.


The End

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Thanks .... take care ... bye bye ...

Special mention :- @olesia @antorv @dmitrik @ukraine-steem @strecoza @andrea.boji

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 2 years ago 

Dear @steem02... You can find rhymes to words very well but... is that poetry?
I am a bit known poet in my country that's why I decided to give you few advices:

  1. Do not rhyme about things and occasions if they don't call an emotion in your heart. For example, this text is a poem just technically — but no poetic or emotional filling in it.
  2. Sometimes verlibres are better to describe sth in a very short but concentrated way.
  3. By rhyming absolutly trivial statements, you depreciate the Poetry. Poetry is not about rhymes, it's about new metaphors (and it's better if they are created by you).

I hope you'll understand and will work to improve yourself as a Poet. And I hope you don't accept it as an offense. Many years ago I've received similar advices, and from that time my poetry has improved.

Wishing you all the best.

As I am Bangladeshi, maybe my words are not being understood. Because the language system of each country is different.....But

Thank you so much for your advice ... I noted this .. @antorv Dear admin.

 2 years ago 

I understad that, English is not my mother tongue, too. All of the words are understood.

Who is your favorite Bangladeshi poet, by the way?

My idol Kazi Nazrul islam And he is my best poet.

 2 years ago (edited)

He is a true poet, I agree. You see, he wrote about what he was s concerned with. What was in his heart. That's the poetry.

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Ukraine and its women are not in your heart, you just took general words and rhymed them :) The poem has the same meaning & even similar words as "Ladies of Grace and Elegance".

If you want to become a real, great poet, you should write deeper.

But again: you have a huge potential and talent!

I admit that I have a lot to learn. Kazi Nazrul Islam is a very great man. And I will try to make myself more beautiful like real poet.

thanks a loot dear admin @antorv .

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