Serbian writing in English: poem BLEEDING FIRE

seethe (54)in #writing • 8 years ago

I hope you will feel this words...

BLEEDING FIRE

Light me torch enchanting fire
so near to blameless yellow leafs.
Naked flame night’s blind desire.
Burning wound, the bleeding grieves.

Wildly gaze at loving prey.
Hungry wolf can smell the feast.
Here lives silence, vainly pray.
See my eyes! Your God is beast!

Alas! My eyes can see much further,
across the narrow valleys creed.
I shall confess my rightly murther,
at last my heart will proudly bleed!

Some Serbian language lessons :)))
In Serbian, Bleeding Fire can be translated as >>> 1. KRVAVA VATRA (крвава ватра) or 2. VATRA KRVARI (ватра крвари)
It is pronounced >>> 1. Krh_Vah_Vah Vah_Trah or 2. Vah_Trah Krh_Vah_Ree
Vatra Krvari is more like "Fire is Bleeding" and Krvava Vatra could be translated as "Bloody Fire"
XD It may seem like a Klingon XD but it isn't so hard, trust me.

Steemit and also Microsoft Word are not familiar with archaic words in English (they both recognized it as a mistake).
So, "murther" is not a mistake :))) it is archaic word for "murder"
Somehow I find it more beautiful to use :))) if murder can be beautiful at all, but it is not the act itself that decides is it beautiful or not, it's about the actor.

See ya! Till next post!

#poetry #art #life #philosophy

8 years ago in #writing by seethe (54)

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richardjuckes (65) 8 years ago

Murther is a lovely old word, with echoes of bother, smother, and of course mother. A murther of crows is much more evocative than a murder of crows. Murder also feels like the act complete, whilst with murther it is still happening.

Further, and I think I am correct in this, the word, murther/murder, was initially used for the killing of a Norman by a non-Norman, of a lord by his servant, so your words for the wolf bring images for me of the forest outlaw, Robin Hood, but violent and not romantic.

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