I started to write, "your customary brilliance", but there is nothing customary about the poem. Your stories are wonderful, but I think you're a born poet. You can't manufacture inspiration. Keep at it. Even if it doesn't pay. Even if people don't seem to get it.
Thank you agmoore. I get swings between poetry and fiction, like which is coming more naturally but historically poetry has been the genre that comes natural to me. It is what I have published outside of steemit and when I get in the mind-set it tends to flow real easy.
I felt the feeling of flow with this poem. Especially for a form poem it washed through me like slow waves at the turn of the tide. There was little editing done on it even though I proofread it numerous times. A few word changes and tightening up the grammar.
Do listen out some hindi Ghazal....especially to "Jagjit Singh" he is Ghazal Maestro with many poetic songs... It is always soothng and relaxing....if ask any recomendation then try out "Hoswalon ko khabar kya.....".....
Seems i get pretty excited....😉 though you do not understand but might you like some soft music.
I love to listen to the flow and intonation of poetry in other languages @steemflow. Thanks for these superb recommendations my friend :-) Also, with the music it will be the relaxation I need after a very busy steemit day lol
I loved this. The rhythm and the imagery got to me. The Ghazal sounds like a lovely style to get into. I am very shamefully myopic in my writing, I must own.
Mate I am also very rare to write poetry in form. I think this is the first successful form poem I've written in over a year. Glad you liked it @warpedpoetic, I thought you might like the visceral, sensory imagery. I take your appreciation is a sign of the quality of this one as your such a great poet!
P.s. you should definitely have a crack at ghazal, it is an interesting and expressive form :-)
Yes I like the feeling the images give to me. The descriptions were really earthy.
I am not good with forms that's why I hide behind the loose rules of free verse but I could try my hands at it, though I doubt I would make something as rich as this.
Thank you for the luck in the competition @donnadavisart
I'm glad you enjoyed the reading :-) I try to always do them attached to my poetry when I have the time. The soothing. lilting tone is a trick of the poets performance style ;-)
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Oh my word, this is amazing. There is such beautiful depth to the imagery, I have listened to your read through again and again, and there is something, for me, probably in your accent, that creates a sense of juxtaposition in the tangible and ethereal. Something so distant and dreamy that also feels grounded through the spoken word. The imagery is so strong, the feral sky at the start and end, this is just so beautiful!
Results and the next round are out! This was so beautiful, I really hope you get chance to write something else for me <3
Thanks @calluna, I listened back to it a few times and was happy with the poem. And especially a form like the Ghazal, which in days past caused frustration for me in trying to write, while still feeling like I could breathe. Certain forms used to make me feel constrained where they offer opportunity now, and I'm pretty sure it is reflective of mental state compared to those two times in my life.
Ha ha, but I'm waxing philosophical now when I should be apologizing for not joining to cast a vote on the other entrants before the comp deadline. I was away from home until today with very limited access to internet. I shall surely write something again in the excellent 'Tell A Story To Me' contest.
P.s. thanks so much for choosing my poem for one of the winning places. But I am more happy that the piece & reading spoke to you so powerfully. It makes me hopeful that I will one day make a career out of my writing when I read responses like this from other writers I admire.
P.s.s. I would be interested to hear if the allusion to birth at the end of the poem was apparent? I was unsure if I had made the imagery too vague.
I started to write, "your customary brilliance", but there is nothing customary about the poem. Your stories are wonderful, but I think you're a born poet. You can't manufacture inspiration. Keep at it. Even if it doesn't pay. Even if people don't seem to get it.
Thank you agmoore. I get swings between poetry and fiction, like which is coming more naturally but historically poetry has been the genre that comes natural to me. It is what I have published outside of steemit and when I get in the mind-set it tends to flow real easy.
I felt the feeling of flow with this poem. Especially for a form poem it washed through me like slow waves at the turn of the tide. There was little editing done on it even though I proofread it numerous times. A few word changes and tightening up the grammar.
I shall surely continue with the poetry :-)
Do listen out some hindi Ghazal....especially to "Jagjit Singh" he is Ghazal Maestro with many poetic songs... It is always soothng and relaxing....if ask any recomendation then try out "Hoswalon ko khabar kya.....".....
Seems i get pretty excited....😉 though you do not understand but might you like some soft music.
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I love to listen to the flow and intonation of poetry in other languages @steemflow. Thanks for these superb recommendations my friend :-) Also, with the music it will be the relaxation I need after a very busy steemit day lol
Hahha..then i think i recomended the best to relax...do try it and let me know...in case you unable to find..i will share the link.....
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Hahha..then i think i recomended the best to relax...do try it and let me know...in case you unable to find..i will share the link.....
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I just been listening to this but need to go to sleep now. Very nice though lol
Hhhahahs...seee it work..😜...have a sound sleep
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I loved this. The rhythm and the imagery got to me. The Ghazal sounds like a lovely style to get into. I am very shamefully myopic in my writing, I must own.
Mate I am also very rare to write poetry in form. I think this is the first successful form poem I've written in over a year. Glad you liked it @warpedpoetic, I thought you might like the visceral, sensory imagery. I take your appreciation is a sign of the quality of this one as your such a great poet!
P.s. you should definitely have a crack at ghazal, it is an interesting and expressive form :-)
Yes I like the feeling the images give to me. The descriptions were really earthy.
I am not good with forms that's why I hide behind the loose rules of free verse but I could try my hands at it, though I doubt I would make something as rich as this.
Good luck with the contest and I LOVE hearing it spoken as you have done. It's so soothing and such a nice calming voice you have.
Thank you for the luck in the competition @donnadavisart
I'm glad you enjoyed the reading :-) I try to always do them attached to my poetry when I have the time. The soothing. lilting tone is a trick of the poets performance style ;-)
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Oh my word, this is amazing. There is such beautiful depth to the imagery, I have listened to your read through again and again, and there is something, for me, probably in your accent, that creates a sense of juxtaposition in the tangible and ethereal. Something so distant and dreamy that also feels grounded through the spoken word. The imagery is so strong, the feral sky at the start and end, this is just so beautiful!
Results and the next round are out! This was so beautiful, I really hope you get chance to write something else for me <3
Thanks @calluna, I listened back to it a few times and was happy with the poem. And especially a form like the Ghazal, which in days past caused frustration for me in trying to write, while still feeling like I could breathe. Certain forms used to make me feel constrained where they offer opportunity now, and I'm pretty sure it is reflective of mental state compared to those two times in my life.
Ha ha, but I'm waxing philosophical now when I should be apologizing for not joining to cast a vote on the other entrants before the comp deadline. I was away from home until today with very limited access to internet. I shall surely write something again in the excellent 'Tell A Story To Me' contest.
P.s. thanks so much for choosing my poem for one of the winning places. But I am more happy that the piece & reading spoke to you so powerfully. It makes me hopeful that I will one day make a career out of my writing when I read responses like this from other writers I admire.
P.s.s. I would be interested to hear if the allusion to birth at the end of the poem was apparent? I was unsure if I had made the imagery too vague.