Happy
I'm Happy. I just Decided to be.
What I am and have today is what I wished for and a triple more. Yesterday, in the year 2055, I was 70 years old. I was hapless. All my surrounding conditions never seized pushing my misery vibes. I was old. I was crippled. I couldn't walk. I couldn't talk. I was diagnosed with a disease unknown to man. I was mere flesh on bones. I had nobody around me and all my family were lost or gone. I lost all I ever had.
I was suffering in silence. My life was lost and I couldn't realise how fast the years went by and brought me to that age. But I must admit; I was a bad person.
Caring was the last thing to cross my mind. I hurt many people. I lied, I stole, I drank, I killed, I did whatever it took to please my ego. In a moment yesterday just before the sunset, I felt so sad and sorry. Sad for what I missed and sorry for what I have done. In a moment, I crossed my hands and closed my eyes, a twinkling tear dripped and I made a wish. I made a wish to be brought back in time to have a second chance.
All I have today is what I wished for and a triple more. I woke up this morning 29 again. I'm healthy now. My happiness is easily found in simple things. I find pleasure in taking a walk alone down the street listening either to silence or the sounds of nature. I'm now living with my family. I even have a job teaching English in my old high school, a job decent enough to make a living.
Now, I may not be the smartest, I may not look the best, I may not have wealth and fame, but all those amount to nothing compared to the rush of joy I get at the end of the day when I can go back to bed, close my eyes and sleep in peace with God and men. I felt I have to start paying back. I decided to train youth on how to become a better person than I was.
It's amazing to find that the best way to get more than what you want is not to ask for much. I now have some friends. To some, I mean the world and to me they mean the heavens.
I'm thankful for what I have. I have just been granted a second chance. Your life too now is your second chance. It's what you wished to escape a hapless one.
Nice post. If my advice matters, I would suggest that you could have built up the suspense a bit more. You woke up too quick in the post, if you know what I mean. All the best. I hope this content gets recognition. And you be
Happy
i agree .. i also felt it needs to slow down a bit. any suggestion ?
I would have explored how the world has changed. Maybe include some sci-fi thing. How the character is struggling to cope up. I am not suggesting you should have overdone it. And finally you should have written the earlier part in present tense.
See I am not a successful writer or anything. These are just my observations. Everyone has their own style. This is yours. You will get there by trial and error.
Actually, you nailed it. You spotted where the story needs to build up. Your comment as a reader matters. I wIll surely work on it. It only started as a facebook post.
As for the first part, it has to be in the past tense because i am given a second chance and brought back to restart again
Love this - represents completely 'Live each day as if its your last'
Carpe diem is the motto !
the best way to get more than what you want is to make good use of what you got. Nice post!
You got it just right