Winter Olympics 2018
The tv is too loud for my ears, but soon it doesn't matter;
I'm not paying attention to the figure skating announcers
while dancers twizzle in tandem,
I'm curled in limbs twining chest hair through nails,
ignoring your strange hairless red feet with blunted nails.
We're glowing in christmas tree light two months gone
after collecting the presents, ice skaters sparkle their sequins
and we're one body twisting torsos with uncovered skin;
when I ride you I turn around so we can both watch the scores:
judge us both technical and component.
First of all i hope you understand what i'm going to say and as always the text is good, the thing is... i think less good than others :-)
It seems like a... i'm exhausted and i have to post today for the followers and i'm here in the couch watching ice skating...
Perhpas the text of today it's more like a blog post wich it's not bad but... its different.
"judge us both technical and component." seems as an echo of being listen that judges in tv an fast came to head.
Its a little like... throwing meat to the lions?
Of course i understand it! it's not a criticism! (if it's as i say) it's just how my own perception of the text style.
I have read some interviews of writers who they obligate themselves to write at least 2 pages a day, they say that most of work of days they dont feel inspired just go to a folder on laptop and it's never used in the book they are writting in that moment, but.. it's like an closets of ideas and when they are writing other text and came the idea: ey i already have thought it! they goes to that folder, they recover the raw idea and model it in order to add to the book.
Perhaps, posting every day i guess it's like all days write an article in a newspaper,and some days all fluid more easily than others.
On the other hand i understand the feeeling "i have to write all days" because it's a training thing..., it seems like the same thing than in a couple of things that i like to do: sports and playing guitar. If you don't train with regularity... the quality of results decrease fast.
Yes. This was exactly the case. Thank you! Not everything can be all effort and refined.
This was the best written post without confusing translated words yet!! I think your immersion in English on here and your posting had significantly improved your words. This was very clear and well lit together. Well done!
And yes. Very similar to guitar and music. You have to do it every day to practice. Some days are better than others.
First of all thanks for your cheers about my improvements in my writing and your patience for trying to understand my comments.
And thanks for the efford of posting every day.
I like read some of your comments about other texts too, you have a big ability of analysis and a deep knowlegment of linguistics.
You're welcome! Your effort and attempts show through and manifest to better use. Practice does make you better.
I figure that you take the time to read and comment on my stuff, I should return the favor and effort.
You are too kind!
Last weekend I think a history came to my mind so perhaps I try to write it as exercise.
Here all people write and just a few like you with professional style so... why not?
As i said in other comment I haven't written nothing since i was 12 and the topic was "what did you do on holidays?" but the fact of not having expectations makes it funny.
I don't know when because I have to find time but i will make the efford of write something, hopefully i will learn more gramatic rules and some new words.
A last reflection, it's about your style of writing erotica, it's sometimes explicit but elegant through a layer of using the proper and rich expression.
It's like the effect of the black & white in the erotic photograph, in these case the photo can be explicit but it lose the "porno" characteristic because of the black & white, it's the same elegant effect you achieve through words.
nice post