LOST MY GRAVITY TO YOU

in #poetry8 years ago (edited)

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I have lost my gravity to you
Because I keep falling in love with you
Despite the odds against us
You still remain my number one
.


I am deeply attracted to you
Just like two opposite poles of a magnet
My wish is to never lose you
Because someone like me deserves someone like you
.


A rainbow consists of 7 colors
You have a color and more beautiful
So elegant like a peacock
The queen to my undying world.


I am drowned in your ocean
Swimming with your feelings towards me
Grateful for the memories we have created
Toast to now, tomorrow and forever.


This is dedicated to every beautiful women around the world, you make the world go round. What can we do without you all?


@imbigdee writes

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Oh wow! On behalf of all women, I must say thanks for these incredibly beautiful words. Your special one must be walking on clouds of euphoria right now.

#Bigwaves

This was a beautifully written poem...I loved every single line.Thank you for sharing this

This is just too beautiful...

Wow
I am beautiful so this poem is for me
Thanks much
Every line just sent butterflies to my tummy

Wow
I am beautiful so this poem is for me
Thanks much
Every line just sent butterflies to my tummy

The poem is full of emotion, and I love how easy it is. Though I feel some parts are better if changed. Like this one:

Just like two unlike poles of a magnet
My wish is to never lose you

Did you choose the word "unlike" intentionally? I find it strange but still readable and full of emotion. If it were me I'll use "opposite" instead of "unlike."

My wish is... I don't know, I feel that "I wish" would be better here.

I'm not a poet and English isn't my native language, I'm just saying that it'll sound better to me that way.

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