I'm so excited by this format of one/two-words, so efficient and fits perfectly the subject. I felt the described vulnerability. But what's most important to me is the music. And the way you control sounds is truly impressive. :)
To me this poem speaks of vulnerability, and a kind of submission, albeit an entirely pleasant and mutually beneficial one! One of my family members is currently training as a massage therapist so I can certainly relate to the sensations and actions you describe. On a technical note, I think the short lines work very well at drawing the reader along - highly controlled and paced in a way that makes it mesmerising - which reflects the subject matter perfectly. Thanks for the read!
HEY! This is brilliant as usual! Taken an ordinary everyday feat and turned it into a possible 4 scenarios in my head!thanks my friend for so seldom to you disappoint me .:) btw what is this format called?
Really glad you're enjoying my content :) It doesn't really have a name. It's just employing ultra short lines. I promise there will be a poetry editing post on this soon.
I'm so excited by this format of one/two-words, so efficient and fits perfectly the subject. I felt the described vulnerability. But what's most important to me is the music. And the way you control sounds is truly impressive. :)
Thank you. And thanks for reading :)
Lines of a wordsmith.
A poetry maestro, I hail thee @damianjayclay
lol. Thanks mate :)
To me this poem speaks of vulnerability, and a kind of submission, albeit an entirely pleasant and mutually beneficial one! One of my family members is currently training as a massage therapist so I can certainly relate to the sensations and actions you describe. On a technical note, I think the short lines work very well at drawing the reader along - highly controlled and paced in a way that makes it mesmerising - which reflects the subject matter perfectly. Thanks for the read!
Yes, the short lines give you a real close-up effect. I'll be discussing this in an editing post in a few weeks. Thanks for reading :)
HEY! This is brilliant as usual! Taken an ordinary everyday feat and turned it into a possible 4 scenarios in my head!thanks my friend for so seldom to you disappoint me .:) btw what is this format called?
Really glad you're enjoying my content :) It doesn't really have a name. It's just employing ultra short lines. I promise there will be a poetry editing post on this soon.
I felt like I had a swedish massage just by reading your poetry... so relaxing... You are really good @damianjayclay!
Haha, I was hoping it would have that effect on some people. Thanks for reading :)
You're welcome and yes, that is the effect on me... I hope I could also do the same with my poetry, good job though!
wow.... now i'm craving one myself! hehehe
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enjoy!!!!!! :)
Thanks, Dreemsteem -- good to have you back. Thanks for reading.
Thanks for writing ;)
And writing so much very good!!!
Hehhee
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