Surface dwellers [Day 14]
Surface dwellers
original poetryA pain twinge & the bells-ringing-pang
Of a present which only half-arrives
Becomes immortalized in the reflection
Of black & ivory eyes reading this page.
An essay of mirrors traced in the shape
Of this phrase, the words turning
Ever so gently to glance backwards—
Turning partly, never quite revealing
Their full face or family crest.
In this instant beauty is their prisoner;
In this moment time quits the sentry
To watch their winding course:
And it watches the eyes that watch the words
That watch the world's surface.
Written by
@d-pend
3/19/18
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Sketches by
Jakub Kowalczyk
.1 — "Landscape sketch 22"
2 — "Landscape sketch 38"
3 — "Landscape sketch 30"
Notes
As it was requested, I will leave some notes on this piece for those curious about my thought process in creating it.
Stanza one
A pain twinge & the bells-ringing-pang
Of a present which only half-arrives
The pain of the limited awareness of being human with our preoccupations and worries that prevent us from being completely in the present moment
Becomes immortalized in the reflection
Of black & ivory eyes reading this page.
Becomes preserved forever in this poem and the eyes that read it.
Stanza two
An essay of mirrors traced in the shape
Of this phrase,
This poem reflects itself, ad infinitum.
the words turning
Ever so gently to glance backwards—
Words, being written by humans, share the human weakness of looking back into what was.
Turning partly, never quite revealing
Their full face or family crest.
However, they are unable to recover the past completely, as separated lovers are unable to reignite fully the flames of their passion. The "full face" of words would also mean their complete meaning, which is only ever partially grasped. "Family crest" means their linguistic origin (from ancient languages forgotten by time.)
Stanza three
In this instant beauty is their prisoner;
In this moment time quits the sentry
To watch their winding course:
In this moment of expression, beauty is the prisoner of these words. Even time quits its sentry duty to watch the course of their travels across this page.
And it watches the eyes that watch the words
That watch the world's surface.
Time also watches the eyes watching this poem. The poem watches the world's surface and attempts to describe it, so we are brought back to the beginning of the poem with the description of the pain of limited human awareness.
I would call myself a poet when I would be able to understand your poems 😅
I read thrice and as always, still couldn’t understand 🤦🏻♀️🤦🏻♀️
Please leave some hints for dumb readers like me 😅
I love this. For my comic I created a world called "Hyperhedron", which is a construction of the greek paricle "Hedre" (a side, fom dodecahedron for instane) and obvious "hyper", it's a world that has many sides, they can be virtual, real or abstract. And this art really gives me the impression of "Hyperhedron".
-Edit- ok now I see you haven't done the art, right? Nice poetry too, I'd love to include some in my works.
😍👏👏
this is the kind of lines that you hear once and it keeps ecoing in your brain
I think it will end up recruiting new words to form a new poem ..
Let's wait and see 😉
I'm honored to pen a brain-echoing line for you @hazem91!
*bows deeply*Let's wait and see indeed... :-DThanks again for a poem that makes me look inside myself to see you and me looking at you through your poem.
Thanks for watching out for us.
As a note... the landscape photo looks like a volcano to me.
With introspect,
@mineopoly
I wish the following day you would do a summary of the meanings of you’re poems or a dtube video , woulda be intersting to hear
In my opinion these words reflects an world where every phase of life is facing the windy environment and words are becoming shaky and the mirror is reflecting the whole different story about life. Thanks for sharing your words with us. 🙂
The words seem to turn in on themselves ... nice effect. Is there an eye sky watching us? Interesting to ponder.
Deft and captivating write.
Man, every time I read one of your poems I honestly have to search for the words to describe it. You have a way of making the reader be completely dumbfounded and stuck in their thoughts... Which I completely dig.
Loved it man!
This is really beautiful and amazing to look at nicely written :)
Wow !. What. A lovely poetry. The structure was well defined with the poetic devices present such as repetition, anaphora and the language is not too difficult to understand; to mention but few. Nice write up with powerful message embedded.