Openmic Week 23 - Original by @brimax
Ever since I saw the sun shine in your eyes I know what you’re thinking of
And all the reasons that I couldn’t find before are now my reasons to love
And anytime I feel a lover’s pain I just close my eyes and say your name
I just want to walk with you
And I just want to talk with you
I know you’re leaving soon cause all your bags are packed and waiting by the door
You look into my eyes I know you’re feeling that I want you some more
And every time I see you leave on that train I close my eyes and just say your name
Cause I just want to walk with you
And I just want to talk with you
Today when you were leaving I couldn’t help myself I just had to see
If you would turn your back, walk away and come and stay with me
You put your bags right back down on the floor, took my hand and as you closed the door
You said
I just want to walk with you
And I just want to talk with you
repeat...
Hey Brother B,
This is definitely one of my favorite originals of yours. Very upbeat, energetic and sweet to play to a loved one. The guitar strumming was nice and I enjoyed the lyrics. Yes, as others have said, the volume of singing is low but I listen with headphones always and I can hear you just fine, but for everyone else, on your next entry, definitely try upping the volume on the output of your microphone, other than that, solid heartwarming performance. Thanks for entering the open mic again, best of luck to your entry. Upvoted
Thank you for your kind words brother. I will definitely get the vocal volume worked out for week 24, which I better getting working on. As always I am looking forward to your week 24 submission. Thanks again,
Brother B
You are most welcome bro. I look forward to checking out your wk 24 entry. I just posted mine. Always having so much fun in this music community with all of you. It's truly a blessing. Keep the music flowing with the Steem indeed :)
Thanks again @verbal-d. I see you did get another one posted. I'm on it after my morning joe.
Brother B
You're most welcome bro, I woke up not too long ago as well. Good morning to you and I wish you an amazing start and a relaxing evening when it ends. So glad it's the weekend.
I feel the love brother!
Like that little guitar thing at the beginning, hit me good. Some constructive criticism (and I know i sometimes have this issue too cause i play the guitar so dam hard usually), give us more vocals in the mix whenever possible. I wanted to hear your voice and the lyrics more, kinda stained to do that. I'm also kinda def so might just be me lol ~
Thanks for the input. I am on the same page, which is why I used a mic this week to try and push up the volume. Singing is a weakness that really needs work on my part. Next one I will push the volume up. Thank you brother, much appreciated.
Brother B
Really like this one...lots of energy! I also really like the build up to the chorus. Stepping it up a level with that mic too! Nice, man!
Nice one
I really appreciate you listening, thank you.