All in a Day's Work: Finish the Story #34

in #finishthestory5 years ago (edited)

The Last Will and Testament of Geralda Connors

by @gwilberiol

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My name is Elisha Crow and I hate my job.

I'm waiting in my office, a sealed envelope before me on the mahogany desk.

I glance at the potted plant, plastic since the real ones keep dying on me. Then at my Harvard's law degree nailed to the wall.

Geralda Heather, nee Connors, died last week, alone in her villa. Her husband left her with twelve million bucks, which she held very close, and a vast hatred towards humankind, which she spread passionately. She died with locked doors and closed windows; dogs and gardener outside on the lawn. No signs of a struggle. She had a weak heart.

I adjust my special glasses and examine my guests.

Sprawled on the sofa as if it belonged to her alone, Brigitta Connors scowls at me. She disapproves of any skin color but her own, and I'm black, wearing a suit that she decided I've stolen. She's the victim's sister, but they weren't on speaking terms. She has the only spare keys to the villa and an alibi.

Sitting rigidly on the small chair near the window, once-violin-prodigy Pearl Heather wilts under my scrutiny. She ran away from home in her teens. She's bald, wrestling with one of the bad cancers. Lost her flat and savings to the medical bills. She's the victim's estranged daughter. She has no friends, no prospects, a pair of lovely eyes and a motive.

Shuffling his feet and glancing at the armchair wondering if it's all right to sit down is John Cotter, the gardener. Employed by the Heathers for fifty years, and they weren't kind people. He's the key witness and a stubborn one, insisting nobody came to visit on that fateful day.
My cell phone vibrates and I glance at the screen. Finally!

Aconite. How did you know, you old fraud.

It's Francine. So bright, so full of life. I wish she'd let me date her, but she's too smart for my cheap lies.

I type: 'I had a hunch, Fran.'

Bull. And I'm Lieutenant Brown to you. Where are they now?

'They're all here. I'm about to start.'

We'll be there in thirty minutes. None of your theatrics, you read me?

'Can't promise that.'

I'm warning you, Crow!

I put down the phone. Sighing, I take off my special glasses, clean them with a handkerchief and leave them on the desk.

I blink as my vision clears. I see Brigitta, looking bored and haughty. Pearl, gazing dreamily at the sky outside. John, who settled for balancing uncomfortably on the armrest.

And the pale specter of Geralda Connors, my client, staring at her killer. She's livid.

I hate my job. I wish it was a job I could quit. You can stop an investigation; you can exit a tribunal. But anywhere I run, I'll still be a psychic. And the dead can tell.

"Ladies and gentleman; thank you for coming," I begin. "Before I read the will, there's a story you need to hear."

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Are you on the edge of your seat? Do you wonder, who killed Geralda Heather? Welcome to finish the story contest, where any ending is possible. Below, I offer my conclusion to this mystery. Drop in on other writers in this week's contest and you will discover more possibilities. This is the intrinsic charm of finish the story. One writer offers a beginning, throws down a sort of challenge. The rest of us have to come up with a creative conclusion. Sounds interesting? Join us next week! All you need is enthusiasm and imagination.

This week @gwilberiol wrote a rather detailed murder mystery. I had to think long and hard to come up with a conclusion to fit his beginning. I hope I've done that.

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My Conclusion:



All in a Day's Work

by @agmoore

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Why do I hate my job, you ask? Because I spend my days negotiating wills--contracts that bind the living to the dead. I stand on the threshold between Here and There.

Is it any wonder the dead eventually noticed me?

Take this case, for example. Geralda Heather. Died suddenly and left a will, which I am about to read. The folder on my desk, an item of great interest to the gardener, John, and the deceased's sister, Brigitta.

The sickly daughter in the corner, Pearl? She knows there's not likely to be anything in the will for her. She and her mother haven't talked for years.

And why would they? Geralda was a dreadful woman. Bitter and stingy, despite her great wealth. It was wealth that made her a target of the murder plan. You see, John and Brigitta became secret lovers and nurtured an ambition to acquire Geralda's wealth. But in order for that to happen, Geralda had to die.

And so they planned. First Brigitta needed to get back in Geralda's good graces. Grovel, if necessary. Then she had to be named beneficiary, and the daughter cut out of the will.

John's part in the scheme was to supply the poison, aconite, grown in the greenhouse.

It was at this stage, with the aconite ripe and the final testament prepared, that the dead tapped me on the shoulder. Not for the first time, mind you. They'd got into a bad habit of coming to me when things became dull on the other side. We, over here, are like characters in a game of Clue to them. They shuffle us around, rearrange our lives and place bets on the outcome.

I am their factotum. My abilities as a psychic make me useful. When the dead learned of the plot against Geralda they could not resist playing a little trick.

My job? See that the daughter became beneficiary, keep the revised will secret. After that, I was to dose Geralda with aconite, before the conspirators had their plan tied up in a neat knot. Traces of their plot would be lying about, enough to condemn them after her death.

Getting the will amended was easy. Geralda fretted about billable hours. I told her a technical adjustment was necessary, but if it didn't take long there'd be no charge. She signed quickly, without reviewing.

The aconite? How did I manage that? A gift, a small bottle of sherry, which I knew to be her favorite bedtime beverage, spiked discretely with deadly extract.

As I prepare to speak now, to make known Geralda's final wishes, the dead distract me with raucous banter. Wagers are placed, odds laid on: How long before the police come? Will the lovers turn on each other? Will there be a conviction?

You ask why I hate my job? Because I can hope for no release from this limbo between the living and the dead. Not until the day I am offered my own pair of dice there, on the other side.

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Now this, I was waiting for the story where the Dead betted on this Will. I, equally so, took a gander, like I think more than three-quarters of oure contest this week, with paranormal forces interferring in some way with the will. Me with It always creating new connections everywhere the New Angels are, you with the Dead gambling and others with the psychic playing the interpretation game with the ghost herself. Upvot’d and resteem’d. (This whole week was a fun week.)

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I don't read whodunits, so I was struggling with this one. The most interesting angle for me lay in the great beyond, which is less restricted in its possibilities than a parlor with four people and a will:)

Me neither. That’s why I skirted around the edge and found the husband the most suspicious in all this. Why wouldn’t he show up to hear about the will, at least to see who’s the last remaining folk of her group.

True :)). He actually figured in my first attempt...then it got too complicated. So I settled for malevolently indifferent personalities from the beyond.

I loved that you kept true to Garalda's character. She wasn't a loved woman from what the story gave.

Crow doing the killer before the plotters ... nice. And he had the will amended before hand. This guy plays with loaded dice.

Yes he does:)) But there's no winning for him
I was at a loss...did my best. You did better. I really loved yours.

Why do I hate my job, you ask? Because I spend my days negotiating wills--contracts that bind the living to the dead. I stand on the threshold between Here and There.

The story is already all enshrined here. We are immersed in the intimacy of a first-person narration, with the character talking about her life. An amazing hook that engages the reader from the opening line.
This is how stories should be written.

After that, my attention started to decline slightly due to the explanation (show don't tell rule) yet it's been sustained by the pleasant structure of the sentences. And then...

My job? See that the daughter became beneficiary, keep the revised will secret.

What a twist! The protagonist shows her evil side. Who would have ever told?

Overall I see your ending as a well-crafted preface to a promising series of episodes. Credit goes to your research of fine concepts about the thin line between living and dead and their interaction, very clever musings that adorn the whole story.

Ah, @bananafish--balm to a soul that suffers perpetual self-doubt. And yet presses on because writing is fun. Thank you.

:-))) Ahh these stories ..our torment and delight!

Ha, ha, those ghosts must have a lot of fun. Just a matter of time before the conspiracy falls apart. The knot untied!

I had to make a flow chart to keep track of the characters! Coming up with a somewhat creditable conclusion...that was a hard knot to tie:)

The creditable part is the hardest one, especially with dialogues.

You said it... had me erasing several versions before I landed on one I could live with.


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I like how in addition to letting the reader know whodunit you also gave us an interesting glimpse of the afterlife! They sound like a rowdy bunch! :D It was stated in It’s A Wonderful Life that every time a bell rings, an angel gets its wings. I wonder what happens when the dead get their dice? Anyway, great read!

A Wonderful Life! What a contrast to our grim tales here. Wings instead of dice--I like that. Great that you remember that :)

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