Kidnapped
The sun's rays went down. Alice was terrified, told him she was coming back to finish what she had started, her breathing was agitated. He heard her car, was furious, had seen her with her lover, had a knife with him. He grabbed her hair, hit her. She was fighting for her life.
In front of her eyes, a woman in black went through the wall and took the man's soul and saved it from him, only her body was left in that abandoned hut. Alice ran into the woods in the middle of the night looking for her son.
In front of her eyes, a woman in black went through the wall and took the man's soul and saved it from him, only her body was left in that abandoned hut. Alice ran into the woods in the middle of the night looking for her son.
This contest is a part of the 100-word tasker,here
I appreciate your reading.
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NICE @luces ,best wishes for the contest.
thank you for your good wishes
Hi @luces. Thank you for joining the contest! You have a very intense subject here, and you’ve done a nice job with the suspense building, which is difficult to do in just 100 words. Getting some editing help from someone with really strong English skills could really help to make your story stronger. For example, several sentences run together without periods at the ends of the sentences, and there is a part of a quote. Feel free to edit the story up until the deadline.
It's already improved, thanks for the suggestion.
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